I want to share this poem?

Question:Images
If only I could breathe in the beauty of the lake
If I could etch it onto some place in my brain
And lie down with its simplicity and purity
Dream of its gentleness caressing my tired mind
Not the hard cement but the soft mist that climbs
Up to the mountain tops, always gentle and pure
Soft grays and blues entwined softly to be like one

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Images
If only I could breathe in the beauty of the lake
If I could etch it onto some place in my brain
And lie down with its simplicity and purity
Dream of its gentleness caressing my tired mind
Not the hard cement but the soft mist that climbs
Up to the mountain tops, always gentle and pure
Soft grays and blues entwined softly to be like one

This is good: it captures the yearning to be at one with serene nature. It's like an impressionistic painting, with both scenery and feeling well rendered.
Just a thought: sometimes "less is more" so if you overdo the "gentle", "pure" and "soft", the effect may be lessened.
Example:
"Soft greys and blues entwined as one" works as well, without repeating the "soft".
Perhaps look for synonyms too.
Nice work though.

that's really good i could picture the images in my mind like a beautiful lake and the mountain tops whic his exactly like you want a poem to be

That is so lovely,,,why does homelessness spring to mind reading it,,,?

It's beautiful and full of imagery but the title is not very engaging.
How about calling it "If I could only breathe"?

i liked it

Thank you for sharing your lovely work. Just personally, I hate the word "Image" which I think belongs only in PR blurb! I would have called this work "Lake"