Tinted Stories?

Question:Everyone knows the story-
the stretched and borrowed rumor,
the echo of the truth.
It's life has reached each wall and locker
each ear and heart and tear and laugh;
each smile has come from your story,
such an untrue tale so spun from yourself.
A whispered gloat,
a fractured secret..
bent and twisted to come alive.
Each one of your friends knows.
Yet you do not;
I know the story.
How dare you?

{This isn't about normal rumors. It's about rumors between friends. For instance, say friends A, B, C, and D.

Well.
A tells B that C did such and such because C told A and so did D, but now C's mad because nobody told her except B. But it isn't like normal rumors.}

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Everyone knows the story-
the stretched and borrowed rumor,
the echo of the truth.
It's life has reached each wall and locker
each ear and heart and tear and laugh;
each smile has come from your story,
such an untrue tale so spun from yourself.
A whispered gloat,
a fractured secret..
bent and twisted to come alive.
Each one of your friends knows.
Yet you do not;
I know the story.
How dare you?

{This isn't about normal rumors. It's about rumors between friends. For instance, say friends A, B, C, and D.

Well.
A tells B that C did such and such because C told A and so did D, but now C's mad because nobody told her except B. But it isn't like normal rumors.}

Great title! Loved it!! Hooked me.

A few things were off:
- "each ear and heart and tear and laugh"
The line is too long, simplify it, cut one of the [and ___] out.
- "Each one of your friends knows"
Change [your friends] to [them] give it more mystery, a little ambiguity.
- "How dare you?"
Great line but in a poem about rumors (damaging, painful, victimizing) the line is a little strong, [how could you] may work better. Actually on second thought the raw anger and hurt of [how dare you] is an interesting twist- ignore my other comment.

These lines were amazing:
"the stretched and borrowed rumor,"
Actually except for the ones I pointed out, they were all amazing; but that one above is definitely my favourite.

And no offence but I really don't care about the story because the poem is great. It's about rumors- period. It may have been inspired by something more complex but it has a Universal Truth to it and That's what makes it good!