This is for someone special, don't forget me. Is it anygood?

Question:"the last time"

I weep for you, i must,
your beauty, my need.
A kiss upon my cheek,
I fall at your feet.

Abandoned, left to die,
cursed and sacrificed.
Icy winds howl in pain,
Remembrence, anguish.

In this world of mine,
you look one last time.
Drove away by pride,
chained to your bonds.

Will you ever forget me,
I can't see the light.
Will my moon return,
In the cool October eve.

The world is turning,
I do, but without you.
In the shadows unseen,
my youth betrayed me.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: "the last time"

I weep for you, i must,
your beauty, my need.
A kiss upon my cheek,
I fall at your feet.

Abandoned, left to die,
cursed and sacrificed.
Icy winds howl in pain,
Remembrence, anguish.

In this world of mine,
you look one last time.
Drove away by pride,
chained to your bonds.

Will you ever forget me,
I can't see the light.
Will my moon return,
In the cool October eve.

The world is turning,
I do, but without you.
In the shadows unseen,
my youth betrayed me.

This is, as usual, a stunning poem. It is effective and moving. The heartfelt words weave a sorrowful tapestry of vivid, emotional images. This poem made me think of those from the past that I want to be remembered by forever. Thank you.

Very interesting.

This teeters between powerful and over-written, between melodrama and passionate feelings. It depends on the mood of the reader as much as on that of the writer. I don't know what more to say. It's a fragile balance.

I think it is great!!!! Good JOb!!! Here is a star!!! REally i think it is good!!!

very nice...will i ever be as good as you, master? will i ever be able to write such amazing poetry?
~grasshopper

As you emote so elequently, I see in my mind a vision of loveliness out of reach and untouchable, creating an emptiness that will be difficult, if not impossible to fill. Good job.

its very well written Steve. You obviously want something you can't have. Is it about what i think it is about?? xoxo.. wonderful job

This one is really really intense- eerie and haunting and it made my heart climb into my throat. I think I hear a cold wind shrieking all the way across miles to where I am.
My plants are wilting in my garden from the heat, how can it be so cold where you are when we are so close to the same river?

I've got this one and two others in this folder that is only for artists of your caliber. So far only one other poet from this site is in there and she is an innocent and already good. A little life experience will make her great. I see she is already one of your contacts so one guess who I mean....

It's not very good as it is just whining and oh poor me .i see your poems a lot dude and it's like your always detoxing off your drugs or you want to die.dude get some mental health.i heard some chicks talking really foul of you and you need to respect them so you can respect yourself.My dad is a psychopath too and i know what you guys go thru .take care my bro and i hope you get out of your drug addiction dude as drugs are bad news.

How could you ever be forgotten?