New poem: drowning?

Question:drowning:

i'm drowning
in my thoughts
in my threats
in the life i wish i lived

i'm gone
never to return
i'm done with disappointments
don't care what it takes to fall asleep

i'm floating
no longer in my body
no longer hearing, seeing
no longer living, but still breathing

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: drowning:

i'm drowning
in my thoughts
in my threats
in the life i wish i lived

i'm gone
never to return
i'm done with disappointments
don't care what it takes to fall asleep

i'm floating
no longer in my body
no longer hearing, seeing
no longer living, but still breathing

This is part of a reply on my post...I thought you'd like it hon

**I am a suicide surviver (1999) and although I was a bit older then, life can actually get that hopeless and I was so thrilled at the thought that I would never wake up again (sad, I know) and I didn't "cut" but, rather "od'd"

I was barely alive 4 hours later when my husband cam home from work, he leaned in to tell me he was home and I uttered, call 911......the rest is history and my life has changed greatly since the day......I am very thankful now that I am here...

I'm also a "teen counselor" at our local school and have gotten a lot of kids and teens into poetry as a means to release frustrations so far, so good with a few exceptions but, they are getting the professional help they need *^_^***

its depressing, but its well written, nice job.. im sure everyone can relate

This has a good flow and a firm voice.

I like the lines:

i'm done with disappointments
don't care what it takes to fall asleep

Best,

Todd

i really like this one :]

i just read your "teen angst" poem and i have to say i like this one much better, but it might be nice if you combined the two...then it'd be even more powerful. this poem is nicely worded and gives a kind of depressing image...O.o nice work!