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Question:With the melting of snow,
water is everywhere,
Anyone would know.

The excessive water causes floods,
seeping in garages, houses and offices.
There would also be mud.

Also the road construction
causing many headaches
Road closed, and detours are some directions.

Never rely on the date,
March 20th, spring, but it can still snow
The arrival of spring can be early or late.

Other signs of spring
leaves grass become green
with birds that sweetly sing.

People get ready to plant gardens and flowers
This work is done each year
Planting can take hours.

Dandelions show their yellow faces
in grass, garden, flower bed back alley
In other words these are every place.

One other type of pest, would be mosquitos
because they are pests no one likes
Their bites will hurt, and a person will know.


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: With the melting of snow,
water is everywhere,
Anyone would know.

The excessive water causes floods,
seeping in garages, houses and offices.
There would also be mud.

Also the road construction
causing many headaches
Road closed, and detours are some directions.

Never rely on the date,
March 20th, spring, but it can still snow
The arrival of spring can be early or late.

Other signs of spring
leaves grass become green
with birds that sweetly sing.

People get ready to plant gardens and flowers
This work is done each year
Planting can take hours.

Dandelions show their yellow faces
in grass, garden, flower bed back alley
In other words these are every place.

One other type of pest, would be mosquitos
because they are pests no one likes
Their bites will hurt, and a person will know.

Some of the poem is really good. Like some more than others. Llke the part from never rely, to this work is done each year. I also like the line dandelions, up to flower bed.

no offense, but its pretty basic. its okay i guess for 5th grade and below in my opinion. im sorry if youre older. i think u should work on thinking more deeply about spring and how people react more with more powerful speech. or try just looking at one facet with detail and good vocabulary. becuase after all, everybody knows what spring is.