I revised it, what do you think now?

Question:I asked about this poem b4, & i revised it using some of the advice... what do u think about it now??

The Boy Who Sewed it Back
By: Nina M?

I compare them, i know i do.
The boy who broke my heart,
to the boy who sewed it back.

To the boy who broke my heart;
I ache for you
You don't speak to me
You won't look at me
You no longer make me laugh.
But you're just a little bit taller
Just a little bit cuter
Your stories just a little more funny
Your eyes just a little more clear
Your smile just a little more pure.
When i see you,
My face turns red
My heart aches
And i want my eyes to well with tears,
But they won't.

To the boy who sewed it back;
When i see you,
I smile unconditionally
My arms and legs go numb.
And my head hurts.
But i love the feeling.
I never want it to end.
When i see you,
I see the boy who makes me happy.
The boy who sewed it back.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I asked about this poem b4, & i revised it using some of the advice... what do u think about it now??

The Boy Who Sewed it Back
By: Nina M?

I compare them, i know i do.
The boy who broke my heart,
to the boy who sewed it back.

To the boy who broke my heart;
I ache for you
You don't speak to me
You won't look at me
You no longer make me laugh.
But you're just a little bit taller
Just a little bit cuter
Your stories just a little more funny
Your eyes just a little more clear
Your smile just a little more pure.
When i see you,
My face turns red
My heart aches
And i want my eyes to well with tears,
But they won't.

To the boy who sewed it back;
When i see you,
I smile unconditionally
My arms and legs go numb.
And my head hurts.
But i love the feeling.
I never want it to end.
When i see you,
I see the boy who makes me happy.
The boy who sewed it back.

WOW, Great poem!!! i loved it!! This is going to get a *star*
Keep it up, i give it a 9 out of 10!!!

have a great day!!
best of luck on your poetry! :)

The only thing that can sow it back is a guy with a bigger package.

pretty good.