I need help with a poem I wrote? (please read)?

Question:Okay, please do not reply with negativity about it being sad and don't call me emo because I am not. I know it's sad, but It's how I really felt at the time and with what I was going through. I haven't written a poem in a long time, so it isn't that good.
Anyway, I was wondering if anyone could please tell me what you think of it? Could you help me make it more rhyming?
Any help would be much appreciated. <3

This poem has no name yet:

As I am standing still..
Frozen in time...
One by one everyone leaves,
Until there’s no one left...
I cry out but no one hears me,
My words are swallowed by the darkness,
I reach out,
But am left behind,
No one beside me,
...lost…and alone…
And I am nothing but a memory…
Swallowed up by time…

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Okay, please do not reply with negativity about it being sad and don't call me emo because I am not. I know it's sad, but It's how I really felt at the time and with what I was going through. I haven't written a poem in a long time, so it isn't that good.
Anyway, I was wondering if anyone could please tell me what you think of it? Could you help me make it more rhyming?
Any help would be much appreciated. <3

This poem has no name yet:

As I am standing still..
Frozen in time...
One by one everyone leaves,
Until there’s no one left...
I cry out but no one hears me,
My words are swallowed by the darkness,
I reach out,
But am left behind,
No one beside me,
...lost…and alone…
And I am nothing but a memory…
Swallowed up by time…

I stand still, frozen in time
All have gone on - I'm left behind with my tears
I cry out in the darkness - Is there no one to hear
Alone I am lost, there is no one at all
Am I but a memory - but for whom to recall?
I reach into the void for a hand to clasp mine
Am I but a memory swallowed in time?
Yet mercy and undying love heard my cry
Then enfolded in wings of comfort - I fly...

that was good. i really felt it.
but if you're feeling that bad you should try Jesus. He can make you happy :)

its is very powerful

ur an amazing writer

This poem is powerful and has a lot of meaning, sounds good just the way it is. Your heading can be like "as time goes by" or "Slowly fading away" someting like that lol...

I am standing here,
Still; frozen in time.
One by one everyone leaves;
Now, there is no one left.

I reach out
But no one is beside me.
I cry out,
But no one hears
Words swallowed up in darkness.

Left behind, I am beyond alone;
I am nothing but a memory
Lost in time.

This is just a BEAUTIFUL poem of sorrow. All it really needs is perhaps a little rearranging of the words you already had. I'd just ignore some of your critics referring to the need for "rhyming". Rhyme loses importance when the heart is gripped by a beautiful expression such this.
Very nice job indeed. I think anyone who has lost loved ones who cannot relate to this.
Several titles that could work with this . . . . . "Lost in Time" or "Lost Memory" or "Frozen Heart"

still: A: B: bill, fill, gill, pill, rill, shrill, till, will,
BL: BR:
B: bill, dill,
C: CH: chill, CL: CR:
D: drill, Frill
E:
F: FR
G: grill H: hill, I J K: kill, krill M: mill
N: O: P: pill
Qu: quill R: S: still, SL: SC: SK: skill, T: U V
W: will X Y Z
A better way is to go to poetry.com. But when I am not near a computer, I use the above

I hope you find that perfect rhyme.

Wow, I think this poem is perfect just as it is. You have effectively drawn your reader into this lonely and desperate moment in time. I like the way you have made darkness and time come alive as if they were a ravenous monster 'swallowing' your voice and in the end YOU.
This piece does not need to rhyme. I think that rhyming would take away from the desperate tone of the poem.
I truly hope things are better now, and that you do not feel so alone.

This poem does not need to rhyme. See autumnlov's division into syllables. It's an excellent poem as it stands.

very detailed. like how it is short and gets to the point. lots od poems are way to long with filler. Small is good. keep up the good work. Smaller is bigger!

That is an excellent poem, no need to change anything.

My Title choice; - Drifting Away