Read my poem?I call it "The mermaid call"...........?

Question:you're here,you're there,
the next moment you're nowhere
and you're mine though you're not.
so I seek you though I loath you,
I dont want you,nor I need you
But you're there when I don't seek you
And you're gone when I do need you.
You dig my heart and twist my soul
You chew my life and leave me none
Of all the things I used to be own.
And there is always you before me
And I do hate you more than life
And if all the "and" will come to end
it will,as I,also have been too late,
I would have simply had a dream
Since eternity is but a sleep
And life the nigtmare in between.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: you're here,you're there,
the next moment you're nowhere
and you're mine though you're not.
so I seek you though I loath you,
I dont want you,nor I need you
But you're there when I don't seek you
And you're gone when I do need you.
You dig my heart and twist my soul
You chew my life and leave me none
Of all the things I used to be own.
And there is always you before me
And I do hate you more than life
And if all the "and" will come to end
it will,as I,also have been too late,
I would have simply had a dream
Since eternity is but a sleep
And life the nigtmare in between.

Hmmmm.... nice.

Good.

Cute.

AWESOME...

It's very interesting. It would be nice if you added some sort of sea reference to get across that it's a mermaid calling for someone seeing that the title is "The mermaid Call" but it's not bad.

This has merit but my question is why do you need all the lines to say this? Some of the best poetry is done with few words and as such each word has stronger meaning. Your last two lines really sum up your poem and are by themselves strong. If it was me, I would spend time on paring this down to really develop the flow and feelings. Good luck.