Don't be scared to read this? (revised) Give me your opinion please?

Question:They told me I might not make it through
I have no regrets, my life was rich.
I was put under and soon awoke
In a fantasy medical slumber.
What I saw, indeed was true.
Something I had heard before.
A tunnel with a light as bright as the sun.
Drifting toward it I felt it's warmth
I was falling off the earth,
Falling toward the light.
I flew as an angel toward the
Light in the blackness of nothing.
I swirled in delight toward
The ever warming rays.
There are angels! How beautiful!
They are circling me. I was euphoric
As they beckoned me to follow.
As the light loomed larger,
A feeling of dread came over me
As the light grew warmer and
Hot, and hotter, and hotter.
These apparitions are pulling me
Closer to the red flames. Yes
I know now! The red flames of hell!
God! Forgive me! Save me! I'm sorry!

As the family stood around
The casket, the Priest finished
The last rites with sorrowfulness.
The family, hugged. "We'll be
With her soon. The priest smiled

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: They told me I might not make it through
I have no regrets, my life was rich.
I was put under and soon awoke
In a fantasy medical slumber.
What I saw, indeed was true.
Something I had heard before.
A tunnel with a light as bright as the sun.
Drifting toward it I felt it's warmth
I was falling off the earth,
Falling toward the light.
I flew as an angel toward the
Light in the blackness of nothing.
I swirled in delight toward
The ever warming rays.
There are angels! How beautiful!
They are circling me. I was euphoric
As they beckoned me to follow.
As the light loomed larger,
A feeling of dread came over me
As the light grew warmer and
Hot, and hotter, and hotter.
These apparitions are pulling me
Closer to the red flames. Yes
I know now! The red flames of hell!
God! Forgive me! Save me! I'm sorry!

As the family stood around
The casket, the Priest finished
The last rites with sorrowfulness.
The family, hugged. "We'll be
With her soon. The priest smiled

wow, that was incredible. it put into words what i often wonder when i hear people say that. thanks, it truly put a lot into perspective for me.

the one thing, though. i didn't feel the horror or the dread in the words as the poor 1st person you descended into hell. i would just replace the "yes, i know now!" near the end of the first stanza with something less curious/suprised and more chilling to the bones.

of course, i say "i would", but i could never come up with something like this. it's captivating, and it's perfect irony. it'd be a crime if you didn't submit that to a poetry contest.

ya its kool

Very moving poem- not sure I like the hell thing though!

I like it, its kind of unique

i really liked it, it didnt go where i expected it to. great writing as well, the words had a nice flow to them . =]

very unique
i think it is good

i really liked this a lot and think you did a great job writing it.