Im 13 i have a new poem rate them if you will? bad :[?

Question:Ode to death
An awful pain
Ode to death
All for fame?
Ode to death
Such a sin
Ode to death
How can you win?

Ode to the doomed
Who shall life for them end
Ode to the doomed
Who soon will be dead
Ode to the doomed
Who can’t decide
Ode to the doomed
Who turn to suicide

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Ode to death
An awful pain
Ode to death
All for fame?
Ode to death
Such a sin
Ode to death
How can you win?

Ode to the doomed
Who shall life for them end
Ode to the doomed
Who soon will be dead
Ode to the doomed
Who can’t decide
Ode to the doomed
Who turn to suicide

Its got a very remorse pattern to its subject. I like it alot. You should move forward with your talent, and possibly send it into someone looking for young talent. Great sense of style and I can't wait to see your next poem. =)

Check out mine if you can =D

well its not relly my type of poetry .. but its really good for your age. i could have never wrote that!

scale of 1 to 10 = 9

lol im 13 too

I quite like it.

Good job!

i rate 6 1/2 over 10. pretty good. you tried too hard. just let it flow out. dont worry about being good. wait--ur 13 adn a boy? great! and who i am to rate you a 17yo pregnant drop out for now.

That is excellent! It's got great imagery and it flows without the awkwardness that is often found. Good job! :)

a lot of repitition. But really good. I dont c why it matters how old u r. im about your age. they were good. keep trying u might go all star. May b even more if your poems werent sooo depresing.

to many "odes"
haha
but overall good

In the second verse, line 2, I would write " who've gone mad". Mad rhymes with dead. I think it is a good poem. Keep writing.

its really good- 9.5