Please rate my poem about falling?

Question:Tell me what you think, and how could i improve if it needs any work.

Falling through the air.....

Falling through the air
i feel a sudden pause
time stops quick
as i begin to feel the fall
fields down below are just a speck
as i hurtle towards the ground
a second feels like an hour
the rush go through my blood
my body goes numb from adrenalin
unable to control
what i wish that i could
some people love the feeling
of no ropes or boundaries
though i feel time is precious
i turn around to see
my parachurte bloom in to spring
its colours i see so vividly
it gulps up the air
as i fall to the earth gently.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Tell me what you think, and how could i improve if it needs any work.

Falling through the air.....

Falling through the air
i feel a sudden pause
time stops quick
as i begin to feel the fall
fields down below are just a speck
as i hurtle towards the ground
a second feels like an hour
the rush go through my blood
my body goes numb from adrenalin
unable to control
what i wish that i could
some people love the feeling
of no ropes or boundaries
though i feel time is precious
i turn around to see
my parachurte bloom in to spring
its colours i see so vividly
it gulps up the air
as i fall to the earth gently.

10. Good poem. As a poet I know enough to know that your bleeding your heart out onto a peice of paper. If your asking someone for there opinon and you think its not the answer you hoped for. Dont listen to them only you can tell how good your poems are.

thats tight you should publish it

I really liked it. Its like you are in the poem. I think you should send it to a publisher and keep up the writing. hope to see it in print someday.

this is Not poetry Dave. It's marely a story with no punctuation.