Im 13 i have a poem... =)?

Question:i have posted this many times but i just am not confident in it please give me your HONEST opinion on my poem

Sometimes

Sometimes it rains
Sometimes it pours
Sometimes the pain
Closes all doors

One day without you
Just goes to waste
I’m feeling so blue
You cant be replaced

My dreams are of days
When we were together
I can’t stop and gaze
Without rain in the weather

I wish you could see
my life is so bland
I wish we could be
But I cant change who I am.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: i have posted this many times but i just am not confident in it please give me your HONEST opinion on my poem

Sometimes

Sometimes it rains
Sometimes it pours
Sometimes the pain
Closes all doors

One day without you
Just goes to waste
I’m feeling so blue
You cant be replaced

My dreams are of days
When we were together
I can’t stop and gaze
Without rain in the weather

I wish you could see
my life is so bland
I wish we could be
But I cant change who I am.

wow thats really deep...
the only weak part was 'I'm feeling so blue' and thats not even bad, just cliché.
the ending was really good too. Its a theme that has been covered by many musicians and poets, but that is because it is so prevalent... People wanting you to change.

Keep on writing!!

its effin good
you should be lika poet
im 13 too so umm yea its tight

I like this poem alot. it helps to write down feelings too. This is very nice, sad but I like the ending the most

That better be dedicated to a lucky someone cuz it is damn good buddy. Keep it up!

Wow, that's really good. This is coming from another 13 year old poet.

really nice

I liked this phrase (I can't remember which famous person said it): Somepeople stand in the rain. Others just get wet.

Wow, I just read some of my old poems from when I was 13, and they weren't this good. You're off to a great start! Don't stop writing.

Wow that is fantastic and emo it is and so cool ..you rock with that it is totally off the hook.

And at the age of 13 he amazes all. That's very good for your age. Nice timing, and nice emotional depiction. Good job, and keep up the good work!
~*WinglessAngel*~