New poem! will you please tell me what you think?

Question:tell me what you think it is about and if you can possibly relate?!

“I Still Miss You”
Brittany Evanko

For months I never thought twice on what you thought of me.
I didn’t know how much of a match our hearts would be.
I refuse to get hurt again, like I have many times in the past.
I can’t help but thinking when I am with you, the time passes so fast.

Seeing the light shimmer in the bright sun, I think of old times we had.
Some of them were the happiest of my life, others simply make me sad.
Can I learn to trust you again; after all you have done in past years?
There were some times that I will never forget, with endless rivers of tears.

There is only so much time until you will be forced to leave.
Anyone’s love can make it through, as long as they believe.
The Army is something that can make you proud,
Never have I been as proud to say something aloud.

Serving your country is never something to be ashamed of.
If it were anything to keep you growing day to day, it would be love.
As for today, I don’t know where we will go or what will unfold.
The things that I need to know are all in your hands to behold.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: tell me what you think it is about and if you can possibly relate?!

“I Still Miss You”
Brittany Evanko

For months I never thought twice on what you thought of me.
I didn’t know how much of a match our hearts would be.
I refuse to get hurt again, like I have many times in the past.
I can’t help but thinking when I am with you, the time passes so fast.

Seeing the light shimmer in the bright sun, I think of old times we had.
Some of them were the happiest of my life, others simply make me sad.
Can I learn to trust you again; after all you have done in past years?
There were some times that I will never forget, with endless rivers of tears.

There is only so much time until you will be forced to leave.
Anyone’s love can make it through, as long as they believe.
The Army is something that can make you proud,
Never have I been as proud to say something aloud.

Serving your country is never something to be ashamed of.
If it were anything to keep you growing day to day, it would be love.
As for today, I don’t know where we will go or what will unfold.
The things that I need to know are all in your hands to behold.

The first two verses are good, especially the second one. Work on the last two. Don't directly mention the Army or serving the country. Say it in a way that someone can conclude that from it, but don't just say it out - it sounds too forced. Try working with the rhyming patterns so it doesn't sounds like some of the words are forced there.
Otherwise, well done.

sorry, good for you for writing a poem but this is so cheeserama.

maybe something about a wife and her army in war husband?

I like the first 2 verse, but the army part sounds kinda forced to be there..

maybe you should mix it.. here and there

Another ******* cliche!

Great poem... but some parts seemed like you only put them there to rhyme.

good
brilliant
keep it up lass

It's got a lot of good ideas. I don't think it's all that bad. I hope he comes back home alive.

Nice try but am not impressed it tells a story that could be in a magazine ~~

I LOOVE THIS PEM YOUR A GOOD WRITER