Is this poem good please answer?

Question:me and my friend made this poem is it good and if not make it better

in my dark and stormy life
you came in and made it bright
and showed me what love was like.
But then as the days passed
I soon realized it wouldn't last
my heart resembled a broken glass.
the peices of my heart were lost
i new right then nothing could cost
more than the pain you caused my heart.
tm

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: me and my friend made this poem is it good and if not make it better

in my dark and stormy life
you came in and made it bright
and showed me what love was like.
But then as the days passed
I soon realized it wouldn't last
my heart resembled a broken glass.
the peices of my heart were lost
i new right then nothing could cost
more than the pain you caused my heart.
tm

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It was a good poem. You had many details that shows the audience picture what your poem is about. You must be a very good writer. It was the most beautiful poem I've ever read. Write more poems so that you will be a good poet. Good luck. :D

very good very good
i especially liked "my heart resembled a broken glass"

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u spelled new wrong :]

but i luv it

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Is the correct spelling you need in order for it to make sense. Besides that, it very good. :-)

i like this poem very much...in a way i can relate to it

I enjoyed it. Love and loss is always a good subject for a poem. Keep on writing.

Very good; just a couple of suggestions

In my dark stormy life
You came and made it bright (or You came and shed light)
You showed me what love was like

Then the days passed away
and time took my brightened day
My heart now resembles broken glass
this just goes to show some things don't last

The pieces of my heart seem to be lost
could they be found and at what's cost

The cost is to dear because the memory
of you is still neat

So until that day I will suffer with shards of pain
and wait until the day
when glass can be repaired without fiery pain.

I put that last part because glass can be melted down and reshaped but only by adding fire.