Another short poem, please help!?

Question:Beyond the water’s edge,
Past the desert sand
And through the passage of time,
A young sycamore stands.
She is an angel, a distant memory,
Perhaps a house for critters.
Even as a tree, she is a sight to behold,
Behind her, as even fades into night,
A heavenly glow can be seen,
Even the sun finds favor with her.

This is harder then I though it would be, I have to come up with eight different poems before Wednesday, all using a different device, such as simile, alliteration, personification, and I also need a shape poem! Goodness, I 'm going to be up late.

Anyways, does this sound good? Does the ending seem to leave questions hanging, do I need to add more?

Thanks in advance!

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Beyond the water’s edge,
Past the desert sand
And through the passage of time,
A young sycamore stands.
She is an angel, a distant memory,
Perhaps a house for critters.
Even as a tree, she is a sight to behold,
Behind her, as even fades into night,
A heavenly glow can be seen,
Even the sun finds favor with her.

This is harder then I though it would be, I have to come up with eight different poems before Wednesday, all using a different device, such as simile, alliteration, personification, and I also need a shape poem! Goodness, I 'm going to be up late.

Anyways, does this sound good? Does the ending seem to leave questions hanging, do I need to add more?

Thanks in advance!

I LOVE it ! A few suggestions if you care , Perhaps you could remove " with her " in the last line , it seems out of place slightly . " And through the time passage " preserves the rhyme .
I enjoyed this one a lot !

Is this the personification poem?
You need to rethink the words you're using:
Beyond....indicates out towards the sea;
Past....back on land;----are we on land or water?

I'd flip these lines after ",,,sycamore stands":
--Perhaps a house for critters,
Even as a tree, she is a sight to behold,
An angel in a distant memory,
With legends to be told---

Cut the last line--again, think of what you're writing:
The EVENING has just faded into night and now there's sun?!
It can end nicely with the heavenly glow line.

Overall try and think of the imagery you're trying to project. Hope this helps.