Please help me with this short poem!?

Question:Pure as rain, your love knows no evil,
You are the heart of all grace
And the source of the sun's rays.

To go on, or stop? Also, would the first line count as a simile?

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Pure as rain, your love knows no evil,
You are the heart of all grace
And the source of the sun's rays.

To go on, or stop? Also, would the first line count as a simile?

I really like you're poem and "Pure as rain" would be a simile. I am not sure about "you're love knows no evil" I think you should end it right there, those three lines express everything very well, its really beautiful!

stop.

if you phrased it as your love is pure as rain then it would be a simile

Maybe metaphor...

Corny, but why stop there. Go on ;)

yes because a simlie is when you compare two nouns (persons, places or things) that are unlike, with "like" or "as."
your comparing the love and rain

First line is a metaphore! And stop it there if you are happy with it that is but I think that is good to stop!

I think you should go on.
The first line is an example of a simile.
Good use of metaphors!

Pure as rain, your love knows no evil,
You are the heart of all grace
your soul, your face
And the source of the sun's rays.
my love is in upheavel

i think so on the simile

its a little flowery 4 my taste :) but i like it it makes sence 2 stop unless u feel absolutly lead 2 continue i woldnt do more then 2 r 3 more lines though because unless someone feels the same warm fuzzies that kinda thing can get old fast 2 a reader

il say whoever it is seems pretty goos
and lucky

Pure as rain, your love knows no evil,
You are the heart of all grace
And the source of the sun's rays.
May they lay upon your face, only to embrace your greatness, you heart of grace.

go on cant stop there ..

with a smile in my heart and a rain drop in my hand I come to share this day for the love you shared has grown with seed you centered in my soul and in my world

the word evil does not belong in this "poem"

the poem is mundane. it is all blah, blah, blah.

it really doesn't say anything and doesn't make me feel anything except bored.

use the five senses to explain your feelings.

make me see it:

pure as a rain-washed flower brushed with drops of crystal

make me feel it:

you are the heart of all grace, that comforts
like warm rays of sunshine
caressing my cold, lonely heart.

Probably stop . A little too airy fairy

Go on but consider the changes I suggested here

"Your love, pure like Spring Rain;
You are the heart of all grace,
the source of sunshine....."

Note :- The rain left alone is turning acidic what with pollution. Your poem is opened on a very good note.
Don't stop, rain or shine....:)