Very short poem...opinions please?

Question:Fog and mist at morn brings the sunshine slow.
The calm wind a blessing, as we know.
Our star will break, the south winds will blow,
And bring with it the dandelion snow.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Fog and mist at morn brings the sunshine slow.
The calm wind a blessing, as we know.
Our star will break, the south winds will blow,
And bring with it the dandelion snow.

Awww, how sweet. This is another perfect example that beauty does not have to be found in the long epic, the "Song of Myself" a simple rhyming quatrain can encase the beauty of the world. Well done, friend, beautiful, succinct, and the painting of a perfect picture.

Your comparison of snow to dandelions, really help the reader picture snowfall.

I love the last line - fantastic

The rest of the poem doesn't quite work.

Grammatically you shouldn't say brings the sunshine slow
(it should be slowly) so that jars a little
To my ear the second line should read 'bring' not 'brings' altho this is probably arguable.
Our star (mm?) meaning? If it is the morning there is no star.
Th south wind will blow not winds
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The poem is very short as you say, and because of that I think a lot of intense scrutiny will be concentrated on it.

I am nit-picking, but I hope you will forgive me.....for appreciating your final line.
Don't let me dishearten you, there are many people not so particular as I am about grammatical inconsistencies.

kewl (Y)