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Question:Forgotten Name Part IV

And slowly, Sirens’ heart made frozen
The glow replaced by vengeful spite
On into bloodied horizon
To chase the sun and bring the night
She closed the book and drew from spirit
Spirit once so pure and fair
Her voice would kill if one would hear it
And devils hid behind her stare
“Death to all who killed my Angel”
“Death to all who’d dare determine”
“Our life was not their own to mangle”
“I’ll seek the priest like stalking Vermin!”
The monastery stood with query
At the dark things drawing nigh
No God would halt this witch’s fury
No good was it to look to sky
Over threshold to the cavern
Deeper than the one before
The place of God turned into tavern
No holy men stood anymore

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Forgotten Name Part IV

And slowly, Sirens’ heart made frozen
The glow replaced by vengeful spite
On into bloodied horizon
To chase the sun and bring the night
She closed the book and drew from spirit
Spirit once so pure and fair
Her voice would kill if one would hear it
And devils hid behind her stare
“Death to all who killed my Angel”
“Death to all who’d dare determine”
“Our life was not their own to mangle”
“I’ll seek the priest like stalking Vermin!”
The monastery stood with query
At the dark things drawing nigh
No God would halt this witch’s fury
No good was it to look to sky
Over threshold to the cavern
Deeper than the one before
The place of God turned into tavern
No holy men stood anymore

This has truly been an epic poem. You have an amazing talent for imagery and rhyme. Your poetry shows a great deal of promise.

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There is a place...tell her, Elaine...

The Sirens -- such a great topic -- they drew men to them and the men never escaped.

Excellent line: On into bloodied horizon
because it foreshadows the entire poem.

This is an interesting choice:
Her voice would kill if one would hear it
because it could be the Siren, or (if you saw Dogma), God.

The poem (I didn't get to read parts 1-3), seems to be a mystical journey through a world filled with wrath and hatred because of the death of a loved one... It's possibly atheistic in nature, but I am not sure.

Good poem.

Indeed, tell her of the magical place!
(This is not chatting, only advice.)

This one almost stands on its own... something only the first really could do as far as the series. But now that I think about it, they all stand on their own, with strength all unique to each. Don't stop now!

By the way, I applaud you for your decision in poetry. These are good enough to be published and Eva told me you refuse to think them through or plan them out before you sit down on answers... if you just come up with these out of sheer imagination... well, we poets are the dreamers...

Blessed Be

this is a wonderful poem....i have been reading it from the start... I can truley relate to a hard heart that has been softened by a friend ...and revenge for that friends life......the thought process of grief mixed with anger.....you have a winner my dear.....you have a talent....

I am sitting, wishing I could do this... but it is never ones purpose to be jealous... I love the ongoing story and, like most of the others, will be sad to see it leave us... but then a new chapter can begin!

Eva watched her lover killing
slaying rumored holy men,
how could her white heart, purest darling
be afflicted with that sin.

But she was no longer witch mortal
with loving heart and care for earth,
the death of love had made her monster,
and damned the womb that gave her birth.

So Eva heard her Siren singing
and mourned the loss of her sweet heart,
when Siren fell into the After,
this crime would keep them, for'er apart.

This is a beautiful poem, with a beautiful spirit, the writer is pained and the ending makes a good message. Never fall as low as those who caused you pain. This was beautiful, my darling.