I rewrote this because I felt like it. Do u like it.?

Question:"fate II"

I never even noticed,
the pouring, sleeting, rain.
As I slice my tender wrist,
with a single razor blade.

The only thing thats noticed,
blinding, searing pain
This is now my final scene,
this show is finally closed.

Black and pregnant storm clouds,
swirl eerily in the sky.
Deep inside my heart of black,
filled full of poison hate.

I fall down on my knees
I broke right down and cried.
Looking at the turgid sky,
I screamed this my fate.

I know the sun will never rise,
and shine on me again.
Now I lie upon the ground,
reverting back to child.

Death is creeps upon me,
not much time remains.
It's now really over,
This hell of mine is done.

As I slip so deeper,
into hells dark deep abyss.
My mind fades to gray,
there is no trail back.

Did I suffer for you,
enough my evil queen.
My life finally over,
I ride off on my steed.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: "fate II"

I never even noticed,
the pouring, sleeting, rain.
As I slice my tender wrist,
with a single razor blade.

The only thing thats noticed,
blinding, searing pain
This is now my final scene,
this show is finally closed.

Black and pregnant storm clouds,
swirl eerily in the sky.
Deep inside my heart of black,
filled full of poison hate.

I fall down on my knees
I broke right down and cried.
Looking at the turgid sky,
I screamed this my fate.

I know the sun will never rise,
and shine on me again.
Now I lie upon the ground,
reverting back to child.

Death is creeps upon me,
not much time remains.
It's now really over,
This hell of mine is done.

As I slip so deeper,
into hells dark deep abyss.
My mind fades to gray,
there is no trail back.

Did I suffer for you,
enough my evil queen.
My life finally over,
I ride off on my steed.

.

So dark, so sad. For some reason this one made me think of that old series Dark Shadows! My mom loved that show. It's a good poem, has only a few minor typos with spelling, but that's ok. Keep on keeping on. Thanks

I really liked the "pregnant storm clouds" line, but I'm sorry to say that I'm not the type of person who enjoys depressing poems.

Once I had lived hopeless, until I had received Jesus Christ as my Lord and Savior, I hope the same for you.

I really like servant4god's answer!

I was the same way until I found Jesus!