My poem please read.?

Question:I am 13 now and i love writeing poems!! If u have advice plz give!! and this is my newest poem called Question

I am scared to say i love you becasue you might say i hate you,
I want to say i miss you but you might say i never think about you,
I want to tell you how much i care but i am scared you would be no were,
I want to know how you feel so i can say
i love you.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I am 13 now and i love writeing poems!! If u have advice plz give!! and this is my newest poem called Question

I am scared to say i love you becasue you might say i hate you,
I want to say i miss you but you might say i never think about you,
I want to tell you how much i care but i am scared you would be no were,
I want to know how you feel so i can say
i love you.

My dear young lady,

As I cannot email you may I as a 77 year old grandfather who has just celebrated his 54th year of marriage say a few kind and hopefully helpful words to you.

Having gone to your Profile and having read some of your poems about love and the effects that you write about. I feel to say that to be able to do so with conviction one has to have been in love. You will have had to feel the deep emotions that love can have upon your life. The joy of being in love and the heartbreak that love can also bring.

At the age of 13 years, you have not yet experienced this kind of love; infatuation, maybe, but true love I doubt it very much.
Read some of the poetry of those who have experienced what you are trying to write about. Feel the passion, the heartbreak in their words. When you can cry over their words
then you will know what it feels like, and it is then that you can write about love.

Call me old fashioned, well maybe I am, but I have been writing poetry for a very long time, and it is only through experience that I have the right to write what I do, to understand what others have gone through.

So am I saying stop writing about love? On the contrary I am not, what I am trying to say is write as a 13 year old and not as a 33 year old. There must be a dozen poems in your mind ready to come out from the times you can remember until now.

But I give you my respect for all of what you have tried to do.
Please keep writing because you do show a lot of promise.

Robert

Very professional poem!

You're a good writer!

keep up the good work. i like it

i like the thought and most of the poem, but i think there is a problem with the third line, it doesnt flow right. also it doesnt really invoke any emotion, and a poem that expresses emotion is a great poem. But like i said i like the thought because im sure thats how many people feel sometimes.

Keep up the great work! You are a good poet and someday will be a great poet. Great poets are needed now more than ever. A great poet moves civilization forward. One word of caution. I have had the experience of asking an intelligent question about a book I was interested in on this site. A moron who never read the book said it was terrible. To this date the moron's ignorant answer remains on the internet. This may not be too credible a site to post your poems or ask for honest and sensible advice. Good luck.

This is an outstanding poem and you did a real great job the only thing i see and that;s it is you put no were as it should be no where but i give you a 10 /10 perfect and a star for you too.Keep writing as you have that poet touch [smile]

Hmm... your spelling needs work, and your capitalization, and if they were improved I think (well, to me at least) it would be easier to read.
No offense, but this poem is not very original, very well-written or with a very firm beat. Sorry, but I didn't really connect to it.

It's good but on the next to the last line are you saying no where? No were doesn't make sense. Don't stop writing just because I found a problem with your poem. I'm not trying to be mean I'm trying to help you. If you love to write by all means write but I would advise you to read, read, read other poetry to help you with your own. That helped me with mine and it will help you with yours. You have some talent now build on it. Learn vocabulary. All poets need to learn this, and grammar and punctuation is a must. If you want to write you must learn to write well. Then other people will enjoy reading your work and not be distracted by misspelled words or disjointed sentences. Really, good luck!