A poem I just wrote and it is based on real life. How do you like it.?

Question:"puerto rico"

My complete existence,
rests on this one night.
I was a made man,
so many years ago.

This thing of ours is known
everywhere around the world.
Cruising on a private jet,
puerto rico here we come.

Loco you are to threaten me,
a man who's made for years.
only crazy puerto ricans,
are that damn insane.

I'm flying to you on a jet,
I'll be back in time for lunch..
We won't even break a sweat,
you're all a bunch of chumps.

Why do people make threats
just come and do your worst.
You have got my address,
I stand alone each night,

Italians have been killing,
since the time of Christ.
I have no fear of anything,
much less a bunch of hicks.

I don't take your threats,
with a grain of Kosher salt,
Take off on a jet tonight,
and let the AK cough.

This your worst decision,
pray and say good-bye.
Sending you straight to hell,
I always keep my word.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: "puerto rico"

My complete existence,
rests on this one night.
I was a made man,
so many years ago.

This thing of ours is known
everywhere around the world.
Cruising on a private jet,
puerto rico here we come.

Loco you are to threaten me,
a man who's made for years.
only crazy puerto ricans,
are that damn insane.

I'm flying to you on a jet,
I'll be back in time for lunch..
We won't even break a sweat,
you're all a bunch of chumps.

Why do people make threats
just come and do your worst.
You have got my address,
I stand alone each night,

Italians have been killing,
since the time of Christ.
I have no fear of anything,
much less a bunch of hicks.

I don't take your threats,
with a grain of Kosher salt,
Take off on a jet tonight,
and let the AK cough.

This your worst decision,
pray and say good-bye.
Sending you straight to hell,
I always keep my word.

You laid it all out nicely. Anyone reading this will surely tremble. I feel the anger and defiance. I hope you're not pist at me. Wait, I'm not Puerto Rican. My Spanish sucks. TD

Okay -- this is hot!

Why have you not capitalized Puerto Rico? I am sure you have a good reason, and I'd like to know. Generally when you use good grammar and punctuation within a poem, you should use it throughout the entire poem.

"with a grain of Kosher salt," -- Wow, until I read this line I thought you were talking about an assassin, this line makes me think of a terrorist.

It's an amazing poem. I am not sure that I have your full meaning, but it is a poem that I will think about many times over. And that, my friend, is what makes a poet.

"puerto rico"

My complete existence,
rests on this one night.
I was a made man,
so many years ago.

This thing of ours is known
everywhere around the world.
Cruising on a private jet,
puerto rico here we come.

Loco you are to threaten me,
a man who's made for years.
only crazy puerto ricans,
are that damn insane.

I'm flying to you on a jet,
I'll be back in time for lunch..
We won't even break a sweat,
you're all a bunch of chumps.

Why do people make threats <--- add ? or ;
just come and do your worst.
You have got my address, <--- delete "got"
I stand alone each night,

Italians have been killing,
since the time of Christ.
I have no fear of anything,
much less a bunch of hicks.

I don't take your threats,
with a grain of Kosher salt, <-- Interesting!
Take off on a jet tonight,
and let the AK cough.

This your worst decision,
pray and say good-bye.
Sending you straight to hell,
I always keep my word.

It's really good. I actually feel what you are saying. A piece of advice that I would recommend though, is to not put your poems on yahoo, because people could take them and sell them. I don't do it, because I wouldn't want somebody to steal my work, that would make me mad. Hope this helps!

The poem could be a lot better, I'm not a big fan of the poem (but then again I'm not a big poetry reader) sorry.

Someone tested your manhood, huh DP? Please don't hurt them Mi Amigo!

Go for it . Let it all hang out. Lets get rid of all the bad seeds.

You can feel or rather read the hate coming from this or rather is it the fact that you aren't scared of anyone. The meaning could be both. Great job as always.

Very good. So this was real life. I can't actually say good or bad really because this is your feelings we're talking about. One can't rate a feeling.

Wow!! amazing!! I've just posted a question about needing help on a war poem, that was soooo amazing maybe you could help???
lizziee xxxx

I am going to stand beside TD and watch.