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Sally

Curious baby
gets in all sorts of mischief
filled with innocent vulnerability
is not afraid yet to live

Silent baby
usually keeps to herself
she speaks only occaisionally
then quickly shuts her mouth

confident sally
is quiet but proud
holds her head so highly
trapped in an unlikely crowd

dreamy sally
chooses not real life but fake
lives her dream life secretly
in hope of a miraculous escape

secretive lady
is so shy yet so sweet
she's consistently a mystery
and always stares at her feet

Invisible woman
Lives her life in disguise
with no one to lean on
Is known solely from lies

Misunderstood woman
was ignored from the start
so no one ever knows
that she's falling apart

Dreamy Sally
Chooses not real life but fake
lives her dream life secretly
In hopes of a miraculous escape.

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Sally

Curious baby
gets in all sorts of mischief
filled with innocent vulnerability
is not afraid yet to live

Silent baby
usually keeps to herself
she speaks only occaisionally
then quickly shuts her mouth

confident sally
is quiet but proud
holds her head so highly
trapped in an unlikely crowd

dreamy sally
chooses not real life but fake
lives her dream life secretly
in hope of a miraculous escape

secretive lady
is so shy yet so sweet
she's consistently a mystery
and always stares at her feet

Invisible woman
Lives her life in disguise
with no one to lean on
Is known solely from lies

Misunderstood woman
was ignored from the start
so no one ever knows
that she's falling apart

Dreamy Sally
Chooses not real life but fake
lives her dream life secretly
In hopes of a miraculous escape.

that's a really nice poem! :-D
i love writing poetry too, and i also posted some on yahoo asnwers. i think you have real imagination and real promise in the field!
Best wishes!

You are very imaginative.
It's a great poem.

Cheers!

very creative! :)

I really like this one.
You have real talent.
The same as your other one I commented on. I would read it aloud and fix a few parts that don't seem to flow.
Very nice work:)

i love them all, going to print them to keep, blue

This poem has potential. It seems a bit too "telly." Try adding more images and descriptions. Remember: "show; don't tell."