Critique my newest poem-plz?

Question:I can’t form the word obsession
Though I know it really fits
My body keeps denying
What my heart always admits
I can’t say the word affliction
Though I know it's how I feel
My hands keep holding onto
What my eyes will never steal
I can’t hear the word fixation
Though I wish that it were true
My mind can’t comprehend
Why my lips are saying adieu

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I can’t form the word obsession
Though I know it really fits
My body keeps denying
What my heart always admits
I can’t say the word affliction
Though I know it's how I feel
My hands keep holding onto
What my eyes will never steal
I can’t hear the word fixation
Though I wish that it were true
My mind can’t comprehend
Why my lips are saying adieu

Very lonesome and right up my ally. I liked it

That right there........was HOT!!!!....

Very nice poem.....the way u said it was gr8!!

wow that is a really good poem. Me being a writer of poetry myself have never written anything that good. So props to you. It is wonderful and it flows nicely. =)

pretty good

The missing piece:

I can't use the word possession
Though I know what's meant to be
My dreams will always follow you
When will you ever set us free?

Excellent poem. Really, not cliche at all--refreshingly original. thank you.

its good i mean... its great, i write myself but you have a different level keep the good work going

A nice lyrical flow to your words. My compliments. Post more.

Enough with the butt kissing.
Lack of puctuation makes it difficult to follow.
The flow is not there.
Don't mix languages.
Try to find some soul.