A short freestyle....opinions appreciated?

Question:In the rainforest by the sea
Lived a girl
In paradise near the sea.
It was home to her and new to me,
And only outsiders
Saw the paradise of the sea.
Her name was Yorleny and she
Wore her dress below the knee
In the beautiful rainforest by the sea.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: In the rainforest by the sea
Lived a girl
In paradise near the sea.
It was home to her and new to me,
And only outsiders
Saw the paradise of the sea.
Her name was Yorleny and she
Wore her dress below the knee
In the beautiful rainforest by the sea.

I really like the rhythm of the poem. I wish it were a little bit longer. I felt disappointment that it ended so quickly.

I was just planning to go to sleep (i am very tierd:P) and I thought 'sure, i'll read a freestyle' so I did, and i'm glad I did:D It is very poetic and beautiful and you should be proud of yourself:)

Very nice... I like how you use the "or" sound throughout: rainforest, Yorleny, wore... Good visuals. Easy on the ears!

Very good, Bob. Thanks for sharing.