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Question:first of all they said it was to dramatic maybe it is but star if you like...here goes
Letter to my Mommy
I am sorry mommy
that I couldnt stay
But that's life for you
In what would have been my world today
You could have loved me mommy
I would have loved you too
But I guess that is how it goes
It is what you had to do
You might have held me mommy
the day that I was born
and since that day never came mommy
I have no heart to be torn
I know you felt bad mommy
I do forgive you
But thats life today
I understand it is what you had to do
Reply to my Baby
Dear Baby
Im sorry to Baby
that you couldnt stay
I was irresponsible and young
NO excuse to kill you anyway
Yes I do love you baby
there is something you must know
I did this out of love
its why i let you go
I regret so much what i have done
its to late and now your gone
I imagine your little body
cradled in my arms asleep
then i start to cry knowing it was you
i chose not to keep
I really do love you baby
ive given you a name
but,

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: first of all they said it was to dramatic maybe it is but star if you like...here goes
Letter to my Mommy
I am sorry mommy
that I couldnt stay
But that's life for you
In what would have been my world today
You could have loved me mommy
I would have loved you too
But I guess that is how it goes
It is what you had to do
You might have held me mommy
the day that I was born
and since that day never came mommy
I have no heart to be torn
I know you felt bad mommy
I do forgive you
But thats life today
I understand it is what you had to do
Reply to my Baby
Dear Baby
Im sorry to Baby
that you couldnt stay
I was irresponsible and young
NO excuse to kill you anyway
Yes I do love you baby
there is something you must know
I did this out of love
its why i let you go
I regret so much what i have done
its to late and now your gone
I imagine your little body
cradled in my arms asleep
then i start to cry knowing it was you
i chose not to keep
I really do love you baby
ive given you a name
but,

oh my god that was so sad and so deep at the same time i really felt this deep in my heart because 8 years ago i too was irresponsible and had an abortion it really makes you stop and think about how special life is

Good poem, maybe they didn't think it was focused enough on prolife issues. you basically just showed them regret from one person.

Ya....I'm sorry but i really didnt like it very much. you used moomy and baby too much. it didnt really flow very well together.

Putting aside the content, which I'm not crazy about: When you mean "you are," it's "you're," not "your." You also need to learn about apostrophes and commas and how to use them.
"its to late" should be "it's too late."
Writers need to use their tools--words--properly. Maybe that's why the magazine didn't want it.

There are a few critical grammatical errors. the letter stand alone 'I' is always Capitalized.
I suggest next time you use the tools in Word to catch errors and allow several other pairs of eyes proof your poems before you submit them.

It is a powerful Poem with a Powerful message.

Can't we just let everyone make there own choices without bullying people into feeling guilty for everything they do? People have to make choices, it is their right. I think it is childish and ignorant in this day and age to still be harping on about this issue when there are far greater ones to deal with.....a personal choice is just that, the majority of people that have an abortion do so because they feel in some way that they have too. It doesn't mean they are going to have a party and celebrate the fact. Maybe support should be given instead of guilt mongering all the time.