Ur serious opinion on this poem?

Question:the way he looked at her was a dream in itself.
he made her feel like the most adored person in the world.
the way his fingers ran through her hair, the soft lips that brushed hers when she least
expected it.
she could still feel the warmth of his touch.
no matter the miles put between them, she would stay in that moment forever, until the
day their hands would meet again...she'd love him......

i wrote this poem after i was forced to move to germany and leave me boyfriend there.....its very important to me..serious answers only please....

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: the way he looked at her was a dream in itself.
he made her feel like the most adored person in the world.
the way his fingers ran through her hair, the soft lips that brushed hers when she least
expected it.
she could still feel the warmth of his touch.
no matter the miles put between them, she would stay in that moment forever, until the
day their hands would meet again...she'd love him......

i wrote this poem after i was forced to move to germany and leave me boyfriend there.....its very important to me..serious answers only please....

in times they say is not the distant that matter but the heart that rule the road to happiness, if your love point is hurt in the affection of loneliness you should consider the perfect life of being yourself one day. maybe a few more month you will met someone else that gives you the same feeling. life is sometimes about moving on. but the feelings you had will be a mark craft in your heart. even leaving love behind is also find greater ones ahead. if you both love that much there is no distance to far. besides a phone call is the closest you can hear his breathing again. and the time will get you together. good luck and all the best.

It's a really good poem. You sound fantastic. The feelingsrestrained in the detraction is disarray. I like it so much. The depth of your destitude is displayed in so blue a gray.

Fanstastic!>

nice words rudi_maa. i have to agree with that.

germany, woa,
did you live in america?

Its alright- I can see the sentiment you're going for there... it lacks an original expression of passion. It fails to represent the relationship as anything but a generic tableau from which all love/lovers could be seen in... it was nice, the structure was okay- the enjambment in 6th line (though I'm sure unintentional due to the line length) was interesting- though better if it were put after the 'until'.

I think the 'he/she' 3rd person point of veiw is awkward but makes it seem more about the feeling than the people which I liked- a first person love poem always risks sounding self absorbed.

Overall, nothing new but something done in the vein of others before quite nicely.

I LOVE THIS POEMIT'S RELLY GOOD