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Question:Passing to Oblivion
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As the west sky turns crimson
slowly the world starts a sinnic war
that drives away hope to see the sun again!

It initiates fear in our heart
the fear of losing our innerself
Amidst the heavy gloom darkened by layers of dust.

So many noises, so many tunes floated in the air
so many faces seemed to gaze at me
with rage in their eyes.....
while a terrible shiver ran across me leaving me out of breath!

Slowly the shiver turned into a scream...
indicating my wish to survive in the dark
to see the day again....
which seemed to be a lingering dream!

While the silhoutte of enormous trees,gazed at me --
my soul slowly passed into oblivion
still making my mind to hope for the dawn
to shine over my tired, drooping eyes!


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Passing to Oblivion
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As the west sky turns crimson
slowly the world starts a sinnic war
that drives away hope to see the sun again!

It initiates fear in our heart
the fear of losing our innerself
Amidst the heavy gloom darkened by layers of dust.

So many noises, so many tunes floated in the air
so many faces seemed to gaze at me
with rage in their eyes.....
while a terrible shiver ran across me leaving me out of breath!

Slowly the shiver turned into a scream...
indicating my wish to survive in the dark
to see the day again....
which seemed to be a lingering dream!

While the silhoutte of enormous trees,gazed at me --
my soul slowly passed into oblivion
still making my mind to hope for the dawn
to shine over my tired, drooping eyes!

it's touching.. i got the breeze while reading your poem. nice one.


got nothing left but hope so i hold on to it every sleepless night
got nothing left but prayer to watch the sun rise one more time
got nothing left but the dying tree to accompany me
as i couldn't close my eyes, awaiting the dawn once again

Quite good .Great piece of poetry

Great interpretation of of hope in the midst of chaos. All that we need in time of troubles "HOPE", for a quitter never wins and the winner never quits, cliche, but true.

quite good

sorry. don't really like it. did nothing for me

Sorry, too depressing for me. The word "sinnic" is not even in the dictionary! Did you mean "cynic"?

Fantastic. I like your poetry. It is the cool sure flush of the cease, and sleep.