I'd really appriciate it if you all would tell me what you think of my poem.

Question:You tell me not to worry.
Everyone’s doing it.
Nothing really happens.
Until things get blurry.

I know so much better.
But I still take that sip.

That one little sip led to so many more.
Now I’m lying on this cold, hard floor.

Thoughts are racing.
Dad’s probably pacing.

My friends say come on lets hit the road.
Not knowing that driver had such a heavy load.

Walked right into a trap.
Speeding down that highway.
With that bottle in my lap.

Colors seem so beautiful now.
If only I’ll remember
But this is a temporary state of “wow”

Music is blasting.
Memories aren’t lasting.

Turned a little too early.
And tried so hard to stop
It was a little too late.
Was all this our fate?

The driver had a family.
A wife and three kids.
Lost.
All at my cost.

Colors are back.
But the music has stopped.
How could that high
So suddenly stop.

I look all around at my so-called friends.
This is how our story ends.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: You tell me not to worry.
Everyone’s doing it.
Nothing really happens.
Until things get blurry.

I know so much better.
But I still take that sip.

That one little sip led to so many more.
Now I’m lying on this cold, hard floor.

Thoughts are racing.
Dad’s probably pacing.

My friends say come on lets hit the road.
Not knowing that driver had such a heavy load.

Walked right into a trap.
Speeding down that highway.
With that bottle in my lap.

Colors seem so beautiful now.
If only I’ll remember
But this is a temporary state of “wow”

Music is blasting.
Memories aren’t lasting.

Turned a little too early.
And tried so hard to stop
It was a little too late.
Was all this our fate?

The driver had a family.
A wife and three kids.
Lost.
All at my cost.

Colors are back.
But the music has stopped.
How could that high
So suddenly stop.

I look all around at my so-called friends.
This is how our story ends.

You do have a lot of talent. Don't listen to Sean. That guy wouldn't know talent if it came up and showed it's hinny at his face. You keep on writing. You're good. You have a powerful message there. I think it's great.

Boring and lacking any talent.

that's very powerful I hope you will find a way to share that with as many people as you can. thanks for sharing.

i thought it was good.

put it on poems-and-quotes.com

:D

awhh that's sad but really good.

It good.
Very good.
But i think people would see this as almost a commercial.
for the say no to drugs things on T.v.
I really like it.
but the industry like more.
Silly.
Serious.
Fun.
Or Sad.
poems.

not really on drugs.
but i like it.

omg i think it is really good
i think its a great concept and a strong message
i think that it is really cool that you know the effects of drinking
A+++

good. has a good message (dont drink and drive)

great poem.
I hope it will touch the lives of others.
Please Don't drink and Drive.

i liked it
:)
i thought it was really good.

did this really happen
or did you just make it up

ANNA!
it lacks talent. =]
jk.
i loveeee it.