Umm i was wondering what you think about this....?

Question:Don't Go
Please don't leave me,
Please tell me its going to be okay.
Hold me in your arms and as I cry,
Let my tears stain your shirt.

Promise me nothing,
Tell me everything.
Hold me so tight,
That I could hardly breathe.
I feel like I'm slipping.
Don't let go..

There went a shooting star,
Make a wish you say.
I close my eyes and wish to stay.
As I open my eyes I notice you,
Your wishing too!

Kiss my forehead,
Show my you love me,
Show me you care.
Tell me you can't live without me,
Let me breathe your air.

I'm begging you to stay,
Not knowing what may happen tomorrow.
Hold on tighter, tighter, tighter!

There went a shooting star,
Make a wish you say.
I close my eyes and wish to stay.
As I open my eyes I notice you,
You're wishing too!

You're making a wish,
A wish to stay.

Hey. Okay well i want to know what you guys think about this poem. If you like it, and tell me why. Yhis is one of my best pieces. Please no rele short answers. Thanx

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Don't Go
Please don't leave me,
Please tell me its going to be okay.
Hold me in your arms and as I cry,
Let my tears stain your shirt.

Promise me nothing,
Tell me everything.
Hold me so tight,
That I could hardly breathe.
I feel like I'm slipping.
Don't let go..

There went a shooting star,
Make a wish you say.
I close my eyes and wish to stay.
As I open my eyes I notice you,
Your wishing too!

Kiss my forehead,
Show my you love me,
Show me you care.
Tell me you can't live without me,
Let me breathe your air.

I'm begging you to stay,
Not knowing what may happen tomorrow.
Hold on tighter, tighter, tighter!

There went a shooting star,
Make a wish you say.
I close my eyes and wish to stay.
As I open my eyes I notice you,
You're wishing too!

You're making a wish,
A wish to stay.

Hey. Okay well i want to know what you guys think about this poem. If you like it, and tell me why. Yhis is one of my best pieces. Please no rele short answers. Thanx

Good effort. I really do appreciate the way you express your feeling in beautiful words. This shows how sensitive u r and how innocent your love is in this poem. keep up good efforts.

Hi, I think this a great poem. Is it what you are feeling now? If you feel it it will show through. It sounds the way I used to feel when I first got married. Hang on to your poetry it serves you well and I think it is fantastic! aloha

This is a plea out of desperation, hoping against hope that he will not leave you. My thoughts about this chap is that he likes your pleading, not only that he wants you to go further by making a wish that he will stay. You are assuming that his wish is what you are wishing for.

I do understand what you are saying, your desperation, for I hear it in your words and I see it in my mind, your holding him, you clinging to him, your pleading and your tears.

For you to say "Promise me nothing" gives him the excuse not to stay. However much you may love this man, he is not in love with you.

One change that you should make is "Do not promise me anything".

My respects to you,

Robert

I really liked it I thought it was really romance.