Aweful poem i wrote a whila ago.....?

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Im bored and i found this poem from a while ago...

Once my dreams
Seemed real
But now I see
You don’t care how I feel

We are together
But only when were alone.
I don’t know whether
It’s true what you’ve shown

I can’t see why
Your acts change
I just sit and sigh
It’s like I’m strange

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: rate it if you will?

Im bored and i found this poem from a while ago...

Once my dreams
Seemed real
But now I see
You don’t care how I feel

We are together
But only when were alone.
I don’t know whether
It’s true what you’ve shown

I can’t see why
Your acts change
I just sit and sigh
It’s like I’m strange

honestly, i do not find that awful.......if you do then i am guessing that you have written much much better than that.....it is a good poem and i can sort of visualize....now, it is not the best poem i have read but it sure is not awful....i like it....on a scale of 1-5, i would rate it a 4.9......i like how it rhymes....i love to write as well but rhyming is something that i cannot quite grasp in my poetry....this poem is good and i am quite certain that you have written a lot of other poems that are just as good or better! keep on writing because you do a good job at it....you should take that up in life.....perhaps, you can have your poems published..i think anyone can....i am trying to do that....sorry i wrote this much but when i start i just cannot stop.....

I like it! Cool!

I like the rhymes especially! Sometimes it's hard to find words that rhymes with the words you wanna use.

Besides the last line, I think it's absolutely wonderful! Why would you ever call it awful?

The teen years are awful aren't they? As you get older you get used to the fact that you aren't the center of the world, you may find it's liberating.

For thirteen, you really have such good writing and poetry timing skills. You should keep up the good work =^-^=
~*WinglessAngel*~

i like it alot.