Would you consider this a poem? and What do you think?

Question:This is something I wrote about a very close friend of mine(pretty much my sister) after being hurt.

The Lost Light
I wonder if you even see
How much pain you cause me.
I wonder if you even care.
Do you think I will always be there?

You better hold me near and dear,
Cause next time you look I might not be here.
All you do is hide from yourself
I was only trying to help,
By Telling you the way I felt.

You put out your fangs,
Your claws,
Your hate,
Directed them toward me and made me your prey.

I’m not your enemy I wish you could see,
I’m only trying to be me.
You run from your shadow,
Point the finger,
Choose to blame,
Personally, I think its kind of lame.

I Know you are better,
Worth my time, but
One of these days I may leave you behind.
You are bad for me,
You bring me tears.

How can you treat me like this after all of these years?
Best friends forever I said one day,
If only I knew you would treat me this way.
I’m not just another one of your fake friends,
Ill be there for you until the end.

You messed me up so bad I wish you could see,
That you are slowly killing me.
All the pain I feel inside,
Sometimes I feel Like I could die.

Then I wouldn’t be there for you,
And that’s what I was put here to do.
Help you to see,
To find the light,
Stop running from your shadow
It will be alright
So stand up tall and enter your mind,
To find yourself that you somehow left behind.

And maybe then you will see me
Not as foe or enemy,
But as the friend who has always been there,
The only one who really cared.

I love you so much,
You are a sister to me,
But family still makes family bleed.
You wound me, stab me
Each time twisting the knife.
Cant you see you are ruining my life?

My back shows the scars of all the betrayal,
The guilt pours on you like tons of hail.
With all the regret, shame, and remorse
You continue down your destructive course.
Its not my fault you feel the shame
You only have yourself to blame.

I can’t control the things you do,
So if you cant blame me, then who?

You did these things to yourself,
don’t blame me for trying to help.
While you stab me in the back
I’m left here with no counter attack

Cause the truth is, I never could see
Myself doing to you what you did to me.
I’m a good person, I’ve been from the start
Sometimes I wonder if you even have a heart.

You are numb and cold
I hope one day you will know
The warmth, the joy
Brought from a boy
Who cares about you
In a different way, but as much as I do

For all I know that’s all it will take,
So stop surrounding yourself with all of these fakes.
They don’t care,
But they’re there,
They feel nothing but cold,
They’re actually here to steal your soul.

I wish you weren’t blind, and then you would know
They’re dimming your light, your inner glow,
The one that you lost, you left behind
The one that I hope someday you will find.

I wouldn’t say these things if they weren’t true,
I honestly do care about you,
With a love so deep, it will never break,
No matter how much pain I take.

I guess what I’m saying is if we ever part ways
It is for you that I will always pray
To feel that light, of a whole new day.

I know It’s hidden deep within you.
So listen to what your heart tells you to do.
Dig deep in your mind, Its difficult to find.
So, be strong don’t give up,
It Always takes a lot of love.
Love for yourself, love for the earth,
And even acceptance of all that has hurt.
With all of this, it’s within your sight.

The Light you’ve never felt before
The kind that means so much more.

Its like one day you open your eyes
And you find a whole new life.
On this day you will feel reborn
It’s this day when you wont feel so torn
By the dark, deception and all of the lies,
You will learn to leave them all behind

You will say as you start a whole new life, “I know myself, and I’m alive.”

Do you understand what I’m saying to you?
Do you understand what I’m asking of you?
I hope so, that’s for sure
Cause I don’t know if I can take anymore.

Make the change, fix yourself
You know I will be here to help
I always am, I always will be
You know you can depend on me.

So help yourself, don’t deny.
I know the pain you feel inside.
So just shut your mouth and open your mind
And you can lead a beautiful life.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: This is something I wrote about a very close friend of mine(pretty much my sister) after being hurt.

The Lost Light
I wonder if you even see
How much pain you cause me.
I wonder if you even care.
Do you think I will always be there?

You better hold me near and dear,
Cause next time you look I might not be here.
All you do is hide from yourself
I was only trying to help,
By Telling you the way I felt.

You put out your fangs,
Your claws,
Your hate,
Directed them toward me and made me your prey.

I’m not your enemy I wish you could see,
I’m only trying to be me.
You run from your shadow,
Point the finger,
Choose to blame,
Personally, I think its kind of lame.

I Know you are better,
Worth my time, but
One of these days I may leave you behind.
You are bad for me,
You bring me tears.

How can you treat me like this after all of these years?
Best friends forever I said one day,
If only I knew you would treat me this way.
I’m not just another one of your fake friends,
Ill be there for you until the end.

You messed me up so bad I wish you could see,
That you are slowly killing me.
All the pain I feel inside,
Sometimes I feel Like I could die.

Then I wouldn’t be there for you,
And that’s what I was put here to do.
Help you to see,
To find the light,
Stop running from your shadow
It will be alright
So stand up tall and enter your mind,
To find yourself that you somehow left behind.

And maybe then you will see me
Not as foe or enemy,
But as the friend who has always been there,
The only one who really cared.

I love you so much,
You are a sister to me,
But family still makes family bleed.
You wound me, stab me
Each time twisting the knife.
Cant you see you are ruining my life?

My back shows the scars of all the betrayal,
The guilt pours on you like tons of hail.
With all the regret, shame, and remorse
You continue down your destructive course.
Its not my fault you feel the shame
You only have yourself to blame.

I can’t control the things you do,
So if you cant blame me, then who?

You did these things to yourself,
don’t blame me for trying to help.
While you stab me in the back
I’m left here with no counter attack

Cause the truth is, I never could see
Myself doing to you what you did to me.
I’m a good person, I’ve been from the start
Sometimes I wonder if you even have a heart.

You are numb and cold
I hope one day you will know
The warmth, the joy
Brought from a boy
Who cares about you
In a different way, but as much as I do

For all I know that’s all it will take,
So stop surrounding yourself with all of these fakes.
They don’t care,
But they’re there,
They feel nothing but cold,
They’re actually here to steal your soul.

I wish you weren’t blind, and then you would know
They’re dimming your light, your inner glow,
The one that you lost, you left behind
The one that I hope someday you will find.

I wouldn’t say these things if they weren’t true,
I honestly do care about you,
With a love so deep, it will never break,
No matter how much pain I take.

I guess what I’m saying is if we ever part ways
It is for you that I will always pray
To feel that light, of a whole new day.

I know It’s hidden deep within you.
So listen to what your heart tells you to do.
Dig deep in your mind, Its difficult to find.
So, be strong don’t give up,
It Always takes a lot of love.
Love for yourself, love for the earth,
And even acceptance of all that has hurt.
With all of this, it’s within your sight.

The Light you’ve never felt before
The kind that means so much more.

Its like one day you open your eyes
And you find a whole new life.
On this day you will feel reborn
It’s this day when you wont feel so torn
By the dark, deception and all of the lies,
You will learn to leave them all behind

You will say as you start a whole new life, “I know myself, and I’m alive.”

Do you understand what I’m saying to you?
Do you understand what I’m asking of you?
I hope so, that’s for sure
Cause I don’t know if I can take anymore.

Make the change, fix yourself
You know I will be here to help
I always am, I always will be
You know you can depend on me.

So help yourself, don’t deny.
I know the pain you feel inside.
So just shut your mouth and open your mind
And you can lead a beautiful life.

I hope your "friend" gets a chance to read this poem, anonymously... it's very easy to see that whatever she did to you, it cut you deeply. I have been writing poetry for about 10 years, give or take... and I have been told by readers, and by strangers who happen to be professors of poetry and writing courses that they feel that the best poems are written by people sharing their deepest feelings in an honest manner. You did so... I felt your confusion, your concern, your pain and your desire to make her understand! Good work! Type the poem up on a computer, and don't sign it... then place it in a spot where you know she will find and read it. Never ever admit you are the author... let her think about it... it will be one heck of a lesson to her... don't hand write it, she may recognize your handwriting. Best of Luck with the friend... and with your poetry! =o)

whoa. i loved it i could feel how you felt... it was if you were telling it to me. i give it 5 stars

Yes I would.

I would consider it a long list of mutterings.

absolutely beautiful. I definately consider it a poem. Congrats hun. Star.

cool! to be honest i even felt the breeze while i am reading it.

original, honest, not going too far or too less, simply perfect. nicely done.