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Question:The Ladybug's Luck

The English call them Ladybird.
Americans call them Ladybug.
In any case, which ever I've heard
to me they are just called bug.
Little red jackets with black polka dot,
they crawl about everywhere
especially in springtime before it gets hot.
I see them crawling on vine and chair
in my garden, I seem to bring these little
bugs in on my clothes.
But an English friend told me this thing,
it seems only the English knows.
"Ladybirds bring you luck," she said,
"if you find them just set them free."
O, the thoughts that went through my head.
"But it works, you'll see."
So I followed her advice one day
and just let a ladybug go.
Nothing happened to me right away
but the ladybug had good luck, you know!

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: The Ladybug's Luck

The English call them Ladybird.
Americans call them Ladybug.
In any case, which ever I've heard
to me they are just called bug.
Little red jackets with black polka dot,
they crawl about everywhere
especially in springtime before it gets hot.
I see them crawling on vine and chair
in my garden, I seem to bring these little
bugs in on my clothes.
But an English friend told me this thing,
it seems only the English knows.
"Ladybirds bring you luck," she said,
"if you find them just set them free."
O, the thoughts that went through my head.
"But it works, you'll see."
So I followed her advice one day
and just let a ladybug go.
Nothing happened to me right away
but the ladybug had good luck, you know!

Oh this is cute as a bug!!!! Delightful in the morning...anytime!!
Just delete all the unnesseccary(*in the morning I don't spell*)
words...and, but, the, it seems only, and just.....words like that.
You'll find this poem has the very same meaning after you do this. Rad to the bone.

althought the community could help with your poem.
i think you should keep it the way it is( it's good), and if any of your own thought come in , then change them.

then it will be your own poem, not by anyone else.

It's a great poem, but you could make it a little longer.

I have a little grammar and vocablary changes hope you like it
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The Ladybug's Luck

The English call them Ladybird.
Americans bid them as Ladybug.
In any case, which ever I've heard
to me they are just called bug.
Little red jackets attired with black polka dot,
they crawl about everywhere
especially in springtime before it gets hot.
I see them crawling on vine and chair
in my garden, I seem to bring these little
bugs in on my clothes.
But an English friend told me this thing,
it seems only the English knows.
"Ladybirds bring you luck," she said,
"if you find them just set them free."
O, the thoughts that went through my head.
"But it works, you'll see."
So I followed her advice one day
and just let a ladybug free.
Nothing happened to me right away
but the ladybug had good luck, you see!

Reply: mikejobs77@yahoo.com

I see some things that you could modify in it, but I won't tell them unless you wish me to. I find it in bad taste to openly edit someone's work. Speak it out loud, though, and find the parts that don't flow well. Those would be the place to start.

I liked this, it brought a smile to my face.

Why don't you break it up into verses?

The English
called bug first verse
(what about this as an alternative line ...to me they are just insect thugs)

Little red
and chair

Set this bit out differently
In my garden I seem to bring
These little bugs in on my clothes
But an Englishman told me this thing
It seems only an Englishman knows

Ladybirds bring
you'll see (make this line longer)
You'll find that it works, just you see"

So I followed
you know

The last line is so clever - a great punch line/

It's defiantly worth keeping.
I think the only thing to change is to add to it. Add something about what luck the ladybug brought.
Nice work:)

Keep it, keep it! Loved the poem and love the little ladybugs...
We 'uster' sing: Ladybug, ladybug, fly away home. Your house is on fire, your children will burn. (This when we had one on our finger...then we'd shake it off.) Certainly good luck!

Read it as if some else had written it, it has the effect of pointing things out that either fit or need some changes made to it.
This poem has to bounce along, if it does not then fix the problem. Consider what you have written as a rough draft, now you have to bring everything together. If you are then happy with the result, then leave it.

Robert