Honest criticism of these poem please?

Question:life comes from a pack of cards
you must play the hands your dealt
even with experiance its hard
you must trust the sixth sense you felt
it could lead to success or destruction
the wrong move will reveal your weakness
this game didnt come with an instruction
but a set of rules the game will leave you speachless
so many hands are cruel
yet so many are sweet
could make you look like a fool
could get you back on your feet
the good hands will leave you feeling a rush
but we always struggle to get that hand
very rarely do we come accross a royal flush
coz it will leave you unable to stand
every now again you must take a gamble
stand you ground if you think the choice is right
understand that the chips you handle
coz they could put you into glorys sight

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: life comes from a pack of cards
you must play the hands your dealt
even with experiance its hard
you must trust the sixth sense you felt
it could lead to success or destruction
the wrong move will reveal your weakness
this game didnt come with an instruction
but a set of rules the game will leave you speachless
so many hands are cruel
yet so many are sweet
could make you look like a fool
could get you back on your feet
the good hands will leave you feeling a rush
but we always struggle to get that hand
very rarely do we come accross a royal flush
coz it will leave you unable to stand
every now again you must take a gamble
stand you ground if you think the choice is right
understand that the chips you handle
coz they could put you into glorys sight

well you asked for honest and im being honest, i found this poem boring it didnt create vivid pictures, it didnt some up any particular emotion in me, trying to liken life to a card game just doesnt work although i understang what your trying to get at

Sorry but this is not poetry.

Uh. . . "honest criticism" it's stupid . . . you sound like a wannabe poet. . . and this is really queer . . . you probably think it's good and you want praise . . . so I'm not giving you any . . .this stinks . . .

i agree with the no emotion part. some of it i found good, but other parts it seem like it dragged on a little bit too long. But u got good ideas and with a lttle practice im sure you'll be great. *remember all poems dont have to rhyme*

I'm sorry but you asked for honest critism so here it is and I'm being perfectly honest;
It's horrible, you're trying way to hard to rhyme, you've spelt a few of the words wrong and it just sounds silly, don't feel to discouraged though and keep trying, you might get better.