Can you give me oppinions on my poem?----thanks!?

Question:I Remember

I remember you
the way you smiled at me
the first time we met.
The way you felt
the first time we kissed.
I remember the way
your voice trembled the first time you said
"I Love You"
I remember every moment that we shared.

I remember you
every time I look at my scarred flesh.
I remember you
with every tear that escapes
my red and swollen eyes.
I remember every silent prayer I made,
and every shuddering breath.

I remember the way
you changed that night.
The way you looked at me
with unfamiliar eyes and expressions.
I remember the first strike
and every single one since.
I remember the way you whispered,
"If I cant have you no one will."

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I Remember

I remember you
the way you smiled at me
the first time we met.
The way you felt
the first time we kissed.
I remember the way
your voice trembled the first time you said
"I Love You"
I remember every moment that we shared.

I remember you
every time I look at my scarred flesh.
I remember you
with every tear that escapes
my red and swollen eyes.
I remember every silent prayer I made,
and every shuddering breath.

I remember the way
you changed that night.
The way you looked at me
with unfamiliar eyes and expressions.
I remember the first strike
and every single one since.
I remember the way you whispered,
"If I cant have you no one will."

I really like this...its soo good. When I first started reading it I thought it wouldn't turn out as well as it was going to...
But good job! You make non-rhyming poetry enjoyable [:

It's Good :P

woah dude its AWESOME
I really really enjoyed your poem your very talented :)

Beautiful poem. I can tell already you have a good personality, and your poem(s) come from heart. Nice job. I Couldn't have done that more beautiful if it saved my life.

It is a wonderful poem and the person you are writing it about is very lucky

It's a really good poem.