Moving right along. "Checkmate No. 6"...is it too short?

Question:*****
The White Rook
by TD Euwaite

Tall Tower
Waiting for the Queen to show the way

She’s the power
I’m the sturdy, sturdy, study rock spire

Stand for hours
Until she’s ready to make moves toward the black line

I devour
Knights and Bishops black power

*****

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: *****
The White Rook
by TD Euwaite

Tall Tower
Waiting for the Queen to show the way

She’s the power
I’m the sturdy, sturdy, study rock spire

Stand for hours
Until she’s ready to make moves toward the black line

I devour
Knights and Bishops black power

*****

So now we have: 1) a Tarot series, 2) a Good Morning series and 3) a Checkmate series. It gets better all the time!

It's okay I guess

I know what you mean, However, i feel you leave your peice open to attack by the use of "Black Power" do you devour because they are black ? Yes. Do they have power because thier black No?

If i may suggest:-

"I devour
Black Knights and Bishops Power".

Great stuff. I like the way you fit into the game!>

I have to agree with Elaine P on this one. Nice

Pssst, the Queen's a guy in drag.

As long as we're airing stereotypes.

Hope this helps.

Wholeheartedly agree with your last addition.
Yes, a bit too short...perhaps a bit more is needed.

Short, but not too short, for the point is clearly made.