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Question:my poem is called: depression (i no its emo so dont bug me)

i sit agony
i cry in despair
my sad emo heart
is far from repair

i just want to cry
i just want to scream
my life is so bad
sometimes i think its a dream

on the outside im smiling
but on the inside im crying
i used to be happy
my heart used to be flying

my dreams are crushed
my heart is broken
i wish to speak words
that have already been spoken

my world is darkness
my world is depression
i hope things go well
at my next counsling session

i sit in agony
i cry in despair
my sad emo heart
is far from repair

rly hope u like! dont b RUDE.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: my poem is called: depression (i no its emo so dont bug me)

i sit agony
i cry in despair
my sad emo heart
is far from repair

i just want to cry
i just want to scream
my life is so bad
sometimes i think its a dream

on the outside im smiling
but on the inside im crying
i used to be happy
my heart used to be flying

my dreams are crushed
my heart is broken
i wish to speak words
that have already been spoken

my world is darkness
my world is depression
i hope things go well
at my next counsling session

i sit in agony
i cry in despair
my sad emo heart
is far from repair

rly hope u like! dont b RUDE.

I rate it a 10 for 10 reasons.
*I like how you spoke the truth and came out with it
*I like the way everything rhymed.
*It's really good
*No Grammer errors
*It's telling a story
*A story of life
*It's sooo good, I could publish it on YouTube
*Non Fiction
*It's not like 3 lines
*It's pretty long(I love long poems)
If you want', I can publish it on youtube if you want, tell me!

I would rate it at a 7.
You have the talent, I think you could do some better descriptions. Some of the wording just needs a bit of work.
Nice work:)

darlin, you need some new friends, I reccommend pbr silos. Those always cheer me up.

I actually think it's good, even though i don't like depressing poems. The thing is that most people don't like reading depressing poems, even though everyone gets depressed at times in their lives. If you plan on ever making a profit with poems, then you should try your hardest to not be depressed. The problem is that when you get depressed you don't want to change, you prefer being depressed. I've been through that, and I'm lucky to have gotten out of it. But the main thing to remember is that you can't stop depression from happening, but you can get over it if you really want to.

You can write a dark poem, if that is what you prefer, but you can also add more imagery, action, rather than statements. These are all broad, general statements that even though all of us can relate to, don't tell us anything specific about the narrator of the poem or what the point of the poem is. In reality it reads like a conversation between you and your therapist, (and I'm not trying to insult here). I think that you have it in you to write a great poem. Keep this, keep editing and adding to it, I know you won't regret it. And whatever you do, keep writing.

It's very emo - which is what I think you were going for, so that makes it pretty good. I give it a 6.5/10. I think that, sometimes with poems, it's more fun to describe how you are sad, rather than simply saying your are sad.

Like, compare the following:

"I am sad"

-OR-

"The sky has no color anymore"

Both of those phrases might mean the same exact thing, but the second one could be part of a really good poem about how you feel.

Well emo or not, as it currently is, it's about a 6-7 I think.
It may be simplistic, but you have a well rounded poem (in other words it has an ending to it), the rhymes don't feel forced even though, again, they are simplistic rhyming and stanza beats.

Still, I do like the 5th stanza the best, the depression and counseling session is a good turn.
"counsling (counseling) is misspelled however.

First line should read, "I sit (in) agony

Also, you should capitalize the first letter in each line of each stanza and punctuate....for instance:

I sit in agony,
I cry in despair;
My said emo heart
Is far from repair.

I just want to cry,
I just want to scream;
My life is so bad
Sometimes I think it's a dream.

On the outside I'm smiling,
On the inside I'm crying;
I used to be happy
My heart used to be flying.

It's a pretty good little poem. If you want to get better; if you want this piece to be better, clean up and pay attention to the details I've mentioned above. Presentation gets you a higher rating from anybody. Presentation of a poem and the way it is properly punctuated and spelled and the flow and structure of it is crucial to that presentation.

I think you need to use words other than sad and bad. They trivialize the problem a bit. And actually using the word emo is a bit odd. Otherwise, it's not bad. You've got a few lines in there that are very well. Try to fix your grammar and spelling too.

Hi,
I'll keep it simple. I like it.
Give it a " 8 ".
Good luck.

i rate it a 9.25 especially because it's hard to find amazing and awesome poems that actually rhyme now. poems that don't rhyme i just don't get. luv it.

honestly i'd giv it a 10. not cuz it ish EmO, but i feel the same way in my life. it seems like my world ish falling on me & no one ish there 2 help me through it. yaa...sooo this poem realy ish kinda related 2 me life also.

life ish hard 4 me & me sis now.....mor than u can imagine.

*EmOP@nd@2 (not alicia)

I think its ten =]
Dont listen what other people have to say about your poems if they dont understand why u write these poems they dont understand you.