What can you say about this poem??? i made this for someone that i have but i ca

Question:Thank you

You came into my life just in time
That I needed someone in my side,
When things in my world is not fine
And there is nothing to do but sigh.

You made things easier for me
You are always there to help me,
You made me feel special everyday
And you captured my heart in that way.

I know that we are not meant to be
And what we have in life is destiny,
But I'm still glad that we've met
Because you're always there for me.

We maybe happy in this way together
But we know this will not always be,
Because this is our destiny
To be only friends as it should be.

No matter what happened to our life
I want you to keep this in your mind,
That in my heart I will always keep you
And I will always say…thank you!

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Thank you

You came into my life just in time
That I needed someone in my side,
When things in my world is not fine
And there is nothing to do but sigh.

You made things easier for me
You are always there to help me,
You made me feel special everyday
And you captured my heart in that way.

I know that we are not meant to be
And what we have in life is destiny,
But I'm still glad that we've met
Because you're always there for me.

We maybe happy in this way together
But we know this will not always be,
Because this is our destiny
To be only friends as it should be.

No matter what happened to our life
I want you to keep this in your mind,
That in my heart I will always keep you
And I will always say…thank you!

this is literally to the point on how your feeling/felt. is it because hes married or chooses not to be with you? if it is use your energy on something more constructive, I'm also finding it hard to walk away from someone after 15months even though I know he wont be with me and no matter what I will always drop everything to share what i can with him

I think it's kind of cheesy and repetitive. It also has a lot of cliché. :( I would rework it, put in more descriptive language, and not repeat the word destiny. Try using an online rhyming dictionary or something, because it looks like you're stuck for words. Have you considered a poem that doesn't rhyme?
Here is a good dictionary: www.rhymezone.com
Don't worry. We all have our good writing days and our bad ones.

omg that is soooooooooooo sweeeeeeeeeet i wish my boyfriend would write me stuff like that................ i think if you trying to impress or get them to be yours than this poem will differently do it...............it also seems like you will never forget or loose this person keep writing poems your great at it and mayb you can write me one even tho you don't kno me lol but the poem waz greeeeaaaaat ............peace out girl scout

3 out of 10. It sounds like a third-grader could have written that. Terrible word choice, and repetitive. What the heck is with the "That in my heart I will always keep you/ And I will always say... thank you!" Terrible! The third stanza doesn't have the same rhyming pattern as the others, and neither does the fifth, in fact, not any of the stanzas have the same rhyming pattern! You also rhyme me with me in the second stanza, and you and you in the fifth. REVISE THIS OR NEVER SHOW IT TO ANYONE, TO AVOID ANY FURTHER PUBLIC HUMILIATION.

hhhmmm, well, not that great,2 repetative,slow,not descriptive.reword it and u made some grammer mistakes. but it was kk.....i guess