Can you critique this poem? it is supposed to be staircase shaped?

Question:THE SCARECROW

Little blackbird up on a perch,
Can you fly to me?
I need a companion on my shoulder
will you be?
I'm not scary as they say
just a little strange
don't be afraid
little blackbird
I won't hurt you
Lies I may tell you
But harmless they be
I may tell you false thoughts
And tell you to believe only me
But how harmful can a straw man as me be?
Everyone else has joined on my shoulder
And they are alive and well
Come join them little bird,
For if you do not
You will be shunned from this place
From your relatives and friends
You are alone, my friend
No one else to back you up
So either you join or you live in solitare without us all
What will it be my dear friend?
Hurry will you please
This straw is getting itchy and I cannot bend my knees
This stake holding me up is
Not very strong
So come now fella
Move along, Move along.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: THE SCARECROW

Little blackbird up on a perch,
Can you fly to me?
I need a companion on my shoulder
will you be?
I'm not scary as they say
just a little strange
don't be afraid
little blackbird
I won't hurt you
Lies I may tell you
But harmless they be
I may tell you false thoughts
And tell you to believe only me
But how harmful can a straw man as me be?
Everyone else has joined on my shoulder
And they are alive and well
Come join them little bird,
For if you do not
You will be shunned from this place
From your relatives and friends
You are alone, my friend
No one else to back you up
So either you join or you live in solitare without us all
What will it be my dear friend?
Hurry will you please
This straw is getting itchy and I cannot bend my knees
This stake holding me up is
Not very strong
So come now fella
Move along, Move along.

This is an excellent start, with creative imagery and telling description.

If it is supposed to be staircase-shaped, then you may need to work on the line breaks a bit. Just be sure to put your line breaks in logical places, to allow for phrasings and good reading rhythm.

You will know it, when you feel it, if you read your lines aloud.

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Very Good. But I believe you are feeling alone and alienated. Loosen up go to the mall
and have a ball.

The poem is thought out, intense, and I enjoyed reading it. Yes, I can see the staircase.

very good, very good, i wish i could write poems like that

can you please give a look at my poem now?
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