Kindly, can you rate my poem?

Question:Vassilious, Exodus, and the Marmalade Cat
- By Dr. Jack
- narrated by Dick Cheney

Habanero pudding on my frosty morning tent,
outside in the Isles of Luvweitzer,
underneath all the mountains I shall find my own way.
I cometh from the ballpark,
I announce to you my presence dear angry katze,
don't devour me, for I am not a rodent.

Your only problem, ney, one of your main problems,
ist yourn ability to decipher very distinct noises whilst asleep.
This causes others around you to stop what they are doing,
shan't they live their own lives underneath your furry wings.

Abomination of the normal lives,
ist easier said than done, I suppose.
Never a squirrel nor a herring shall ever find their way back from,
the deep forest above the isles.

I know no company that can keep up with the mules.
Why must you walk to the end of the plank like chattle?
Shan't you have your own imagination or mental refuge?
I sup'ose you ne'er seen a donkey in the middle of Oktoberfest,

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Vassilious, Exodus, and the Marmalade Cat
- By Dr. Jack
- narrated by Dick Cheney

Habanero pudding on my frosty morning tent,
outside in the Isles of Luvweitzer,
underneath all the mountains I shall find my own way.
I cometh from the ballpark,
I announce to you my presence dear angry katze,
don't devour me, for I am not a rodent.

Your only problem, ney, one of your main problems,
ist yourn ability to decipher very distinct noises whilst asleep.
This causes others around you to stop what they are doing,
shan't they live their own lives underneath your furry wings.

Abomination of the normal lives,
ist easier said than done, I suppose.
Never a squirrel nor a herring shall ever find their way back from,
the deep forest above the isles.

I know no company that can keep up with the mules.
Why must you walk to the end of the plank like chattle?
Shan't you have your own imagination or mental refuge?
I sup'ose you ne'er seen a donkey in the middle of Oktoberfest,

The voice, flow, and passion in the poem is beautiful. I say a job well done.

It was well written, but being a kid some of the formal language confused me.

I'm 11 so this makes no sense to me. Maybe it will to adults though!

its one of those poems that you can just sit down and linger over, and everytime you reread it its secrets slowly become apperent.I like it.

Son, your poem is essentially equisite, it raises many questions and its components are essentially flawless. I noticed a variety of emotional fluctuations as I read your brilliant work, but I would've suggested adding something about the Queen and your plane, yet you beat me to the punch, Bravo! Rating: 10/10

Bemused it left me, however I shall return and savor the telling.
Bravo.