Which do you think is a better poem?

Question:Which is better?
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Everlasting Dance

I'm next to you,
Not knowing what to say,
Without an effort,
I just walk away,

The mystery your eyes told,
Makes me wonder,
Is your heart made of gold?

I never meant any harm,
I really do like your charm,

To say "I love you",
Just won't come,

I take one last glance,
At the memories we've both had,
In this everlasting dance
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Or
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Between Us

We both know we can't lie,
If we do,
Our love would die,

I just want to know the answer,
Because the more we wait,
It'll become too great,
What shall we do?

I didn't lie,
I hope you didn't either,

But yet,
There is a lie,
We could both bet,
That it's right between us

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Thnxx,
Julie

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Which is better?
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Everlasting Dance

I'm next to you,
Not knowing what to say,
Without an effort,
I just walk away,

The mystery your eyes told,
Makes me wonder,
Is your heart made of gold?

I never meant any harm,
I really do like your charm,

To say "I love you",
Just won't come,

I take one last glance,
At the memories we've both had,
In this everlasting dance
------------------------------------
Or
------------------------------------

Between Us

We both know we can't lie,
If we do,
Our love would die,

I just want to know the answer,
Because the more we wait,
It'll become too great,
What shall we do?

I didn't lie,
I hope you didn't either,

But yet,
There is a lie,
We could both bet,
That it's right between us

----------------------------------

Thnxx,
Julie

"Everlasting Dance", especially if its for a wedding or something like that.
"Between Us" has too many stanzas about lies, showing vulnerability and mistrust.

They both are kinda cliche and a lot of the rhymes are forced.

But If i HAD to pick one, I'd say the first.

both of them are just alright but i would say the first one if i had to pick

Everlasting dance

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Everlasting Dance
for the fact that it makes more sense then the second one
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