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Question:Ruins
By Semper Fi Reborn

He stepped out of the charred remains
Of a tattered existence
Like a worn rag
Trying to wash away resistance
To the call of libation
Which funded his fall
Into a world
He never thought cared at all

She stepped onto the curb
Of every street in the world
Another strange encounter
For a hope depraved girl
She was sick and afraid
Of the abuse she oft got
Having to be all the things
She knew she was not
Turning away from the dark
Running toward light
Embracing the day
Letting go of the night

Two stories
Two souls
Two people in need
Of love and affection
From a world
That breeds greed
From hell
Soar to Heaven
Like the dreams
You're pursuing
Two people
Both blessed
Stepped out of the ruins

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Ruins
By Semper Fi Reborn

He stepped out of the charred remains
Of a tattered existence
Like a worn rag
Trying to wash away resistance
To the call of libation
Which funded his fall
Into a world
He never thought cared at all

She stepped onto the curb
Of every street in the world
Another strange encounter
For a hope depraved girl
She was sick and afraid
Of the abuse she oft got
Having to be all the things
She knew she was not
Turning away from the dark
Running toward light
Embracing the day
Letting go of the night

Two stories
Two souls
Two people in need
Of love and affection
From a world
That breeds greed
From hell
Soar to Heaven
Like the dreams
You're pursuing
Two people
Both blessed
Stepped out of the ruins

WOW! I like it very much.

I think it would read even easier if you punctuated it with commas and semi-colons and periods.

Otherwise, it flows like butter in the words expressed and I think this piece has a marvelous story and message. The images "like a worn rag trying to wash away resistence"and "soar to heaven like the dreams you're pursuing" are delightfully descriptive to the message of the piece about tired worn out people who really do manage to fight their way through and out of the ashes of ruined lives.
Ruins is a perfect title.

Very Nice Job!!! I agree. Both are blessed.

Wonderful! I've had the fortune to witness some of those folks.
Flowers!

This is so wonderful a poem with so much love and hope in between.I likes how they were both in the darkness and them when they came into the light things came much better for the girl and for the guy also.I likes this 2 people blessed out of the ruins.Amen Semper Fi .really so lovely my friend.

WOW! This one's REALLY good Semper. I liked it very much!

Ignore Eric(eater of dung beetle pie). This is in no way trite at all. I found the imagery beautiful, and my heart reaching out to those two people who have managed to drag themselves from the ruins. Recreation of self is one of the hardest processes to undergo, and having been there before, this poem was a shining beacon of hope and something that hasn't been done before. I don't do a great deal of rhyming or form but I must say I found yours exquisite, eye catching and totally absorbing. This was a beautiful piece of work. Would you mind terribly if I wrote it down and kept it with my collection?

very veryy very very very....ok just WOW its good

can you please look at my poem and comment now?
it will be appreciated
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The first part I think of a fire
because of the charred remains
Then a girl come in the picture
she was sick scared
I can see she was running away from something.
Or she was getting from the dark into the light.
These are two stories
about two people
the girl is in need for sure
because from the abuse
which happened quite often.

Wow that was amazing. It was a little rough at first but by the middle it flowed like waves of grace. EXCELLENT!

Terrible is the only thing I can say. I could try to give you advice, but you'll just keep pumping out the same tripe you always do anyway.