An acrostic poem My first attempt. How is this.?

Question:"devils work"

Painfully wasting my life away,
Against all the odds I am still here.
In just a few years, just a memory,
No more Dark Prince, no more of me.

Hardly a day goes by I don't cry,
Under my exterior an emotional mess.
Render to Caesar that which you owe,
Time after time, I wish I had died.

Denial of time is just like a sin,
Each minute wasted just disappeared.
And now I know that i've wasted my life,
True as I know, I should not have been born.
Heaven is waiting, but Hell won't be scorned.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: "devils work"

Painfully wasting my life away,
Against all the odds I am still here.
In just a few years, just a memory,
No more Dark Prince, no more of me.

Hardly a day goes by I don't cry,
Under my exterior an emotional mess.
Render to Caesar that which you owe,
Time after time, I wish I had died.

Denial of time is just like a sin,
Each minute wasted just disappeared.
And now I know that i've wasted my life,
True as I know, I should not have been born.
Heaven is waiting, but Hell won't be scorned.

Don't know if it is the discipline of the acrostic but this is the first time I have felt you were truly writing a poem. Your other works are rhyming verses.
Why is your life wasted? Would some fisherman on a small island who spends his life catching fish, going home, eating his supper, dozing his free-time away think 'I am wasting my life' - that is life for so many. In a city context - getting up, going to work, watching tv, bed - getting up, going to work, watching tv, bed........Yes, I know that seems pointless but the person doing it is alive, thinking, laughing, chatting to friends and neighbours, eating and drinking, shopping; all mundane things but they make up what life is.
Thanks for your POEM.

Why begin with the word "painfully" when the acrostic aspect of it already highlights the word "pain"? Seems like unnecessary repetition to me, and eliminates the whole point of it being acrostic- that is, to get out something you didn't want to state directly in the body.

But I drolled on WAY too long about that. Nicely done.

To try and survive in these days, we have to dwell on the good things. I don't see any good or beauty in your poem. You may be expressing your feelings, but until you start focusing on the positive side, you may stay in your little black hole...

I liked it a lot. Good work.

good work, dark prince

smile :)

pretty good for first attempt. I still have a first attempt to do someday.

Very well written!!!

For answering you, I'll drop the dime,
Unless you think it's a waste of time.
Cry no more in lonesome sorrow.
Know it'll be better tomorrow.

Hope again shall spring eternal
Each day blooms bright in Life's sweet journal
Rise again from your pain infernal.

i like it...i need to try that...it's like the thing you do with names right? like...
S...
T...
E...
V...
E...
right? something like that....i'll try that....yeah....i need to try that....

It is good.