Here is my revised edititon...but it still needs more work...?

Question:I asked a question today about my poem and took the comments that they gave about it and made this poem but i still dont think its good enough!!

Alone in the cruel world of the gods
He recalls the day Zeus smite him with his golden rods
As punishment for all the suffering he stirred up
He must hold up Earth…………..
No one to help him
No one to save him
No one to take the pain away.
His shoulders feel like collapsing more day by day
Just as his brothers also left to lay
In a sea of anguish, with just one quest;
For their souls to finally be put to rest

The "......" means i dont know what to put for it...Please comment and help me on the "........" part. THANK YOU

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I asked a question today about my poem and took the comments that they gave about it and made this poem but i still dont think its good enough!!

Alone in the cruel world of the gods
He recalls the day Zeus smite him with his golden rods
As punishment for all the suffering he stirred up
He must hold up Earth…………..
No one to help him
No one to save him
No one to take the pain away.
His shoulders feel like collapsing more day by day
Just as his brothers also left to lay
In a sea of anguish, with just one quest;
For their souls to finally be put to rest

The "......" means i dont know what to put for it...Please comment and help me on the "........" part. THANK YOU

getting closer dear keep working here's my revise:

Alone in the cruel world of the gods
Zeus smites him with his golden rods
As punishment for all the suffering caused
the universe he must forever wear
No one to help him carry the weight
No one to save him from this fate
No one to take the pain away.
His shoulders ache day after day
Just as his brothers he must pay
for they too were left to lay
In a sea of anguish, with just one quest;
For the day their souls can finally rest

hows that?I'm not sure about the ending though *for they too were left to lay* doesn't sound right but i don't know what else would fit

"single handedly"
"solitarily"

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it sounds very nice.

well you picked a very interesting topic to make a poem out of. Mythological poems seemed to have stopped after the fall of the roman empire. so it is something i don't see often but my suggestion would be to find a synonmyn for up and then see if you can think of a line for the ".......". i hope that helps. very good by the way

", his lonely bitter cup."

Also, "smite" I think should be "smote".

Hmmm, very nice, and thank you for your comment by the way.

Alone, in the cruel world of the gods,
recalling the smite of Zeus' golden rods,
as punishment for the suffering caused,
he must hold up Earth, without ever a pause.

No one to help him.
No one to save him.

No one to take the pain away,
His shoulders collapse more,
day by day,
just as his brothers left also to lay

in a sea of their anguish, with just one request;
that their ancient misdeeds be but finally to rest.

I don't know if you'll like it, but it's yours if you do. Have a good day and never stop writing.

Topic is very rare and hard to write about.

He must hold up earth on his shoulders buff?

I think you should combine "No one to help him, No one to save him" into "No one to help or save him" and then continue with "No one to take the pain away"

I would focus a lot on the fact that he doesn't want to live anymore because it's causing him pain.

Here's an example:
Alone in the cruel world of the gods
He recalls the day Zeus smote him with his golden rods
As punishment for all the suffering he stirred
The Earth he must hold forever undisturbed
(or add in the line i suggested up there)
No one to help or save him
No one to take the pain away.
His shoulders seethe in pain day by day

Just as his brothers also left to lay
He is crumbling each minute in dismay
In a sea of anguish, with just one quest;
For their souls to finally be put to rest

"as a burden"
or
"he must hold the earth on his shoulders"

:)

How about this way:

Alone in the realm of gods
He recalls how Zeus smote him
With golden rods
As payment for past sufferings
He must hold up the Earth
With no one to help him
Or to save him
Or ease the pain
He feels the weight of his burden
Upon his shoulders
As his spirit is weighed down eternally
Like his brothers
He lays in a sea of anguish
With just one quest
That there souls
Should soon find rest