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Question:First Kisses

Kisses from so faltering
lips so fluently reluctant despite
soaring in disconcert so arousing
glee like so from serpents slithering
surreal depths so detached in reminiscence

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: First Kisses

Kisses from so faltering
lips so fluently reluctant despite
soaring in disconcert so arousing
glee like so from serpents slithering
surreal depths so detached in reminiscence

This one shows your growth as a writer over the last year. It is concise and powerful, one of your best. TD

indeed...!