Do you think this poem is cool?

Question:first kisses

The kiss from so faltering
lips so fluently reluctant despite
soaring in affect arousing
glee like from serpents slithering
depths festering in detached remembrance.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: first kisses

The kiss from so faltering
lips so fluently reluctant despite
soaring in affect arousing
glee like from serpents slithering
depths festering in detached remembrance.

i dont think this poem is cool
but awesome! lol ur words are deep
r u a poet?

really deep...i like it a lot, would be proud to have written this.

its short but it says a lot, i like it

Not really.

to be honest i don't really like it but the words are incradble

I think you have immense potential! This is very evocative.
I think that some times less is more and you might try omitting a few words to make this more powerful. Perhaps...

First Kisses

The kiss from faltering
lips so reluctant despite
soaring in arousing
glee from serpent's slithering
depths in detached remembrance.

yeeeeeup...! it creates new thoughts and extends the minds assumptions into new places....luring it out into new and formerly unknown associations...as a good poem should...bravo!

really deep! you're good. :) keep on writing.

I thought the first part was cool, but the part about serpents slithering and festering turned me off. Like the others, I think you have potential.

Totally cool.