Another Poem,good?

Question:My Comrades Lay There,There Souls And Bodies Dead...
Its Hard For me to Sleep at night,To difficult to lay down my Head..
They Were Brave and Proud Men...
I Left them Alone..To Stuborn To Help...
I'll Never make that mistake again...

My Friends and Family Were My Happiness....
They Would Scare away the darkness...

How i miss there Funny Joy Day....

After Whats Happened...
I dont think i could look at it the same Way...

They Were my Friends...They Laughed me to Bed...
But Since There Gone,Far way from Me..
My Soul And My Spirit Are Dead..

I'm Moving On..
Taking Your Hearts and Your Spirits With Me..

GoodBye....My Friends

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: My Comrades Lay There,There Souls And Bodies Dead...
Its Hard For me to Sleep at night,To difficult to lay down my Head..
They Were Brave and Proud Men...
I Left them Alone..To Stuborn To Help...
I'll Never make that mistake again...

My Friends and Family Were My Happiness....
They Would Scare away the darkness...

How i miss there Funny Joy Day....

After Whats Happened...
I dont think i could look at it the same Way...

They Were my Friends...They Laughed me to Bed...
But Since There Gone,Far way from Me..
My Soul And My Spirit Are Dead..

I'm Moving On..
Taking Your Hearts and Your Spirits With Me..

GoodBye....My Friends

i can feel the emotion in it, you did an exellent job with that. i love the fact that it isn't so structured unlike the many others i have read on the web.

Dear God what absolute slop. The worst aspect of this cesspool is the fact that you seem to be trying to gain favor by appealing to the emotion surrounding the death (presumably during service to others) of fellows.