Will somebody take some time to edit my poem?

Question:I know there are mistakes I'm not seeing, for some reason... but I wanna have it edited before I enter it in a couple contests... if anyone here is nice enough to look through and edit it fully and include it in their answer (or email it to mgranny1407@aol.com - my grandma's email) will get 10 points
Thanks in advance!!!
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Why Love~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Why should I love someone who doesn't love me back
But I love him so much I can't keep on track

Who can control their heart
Someone please teach me that great art

Why do I go throw this pain
It is making me go insane
I now he will never love me
Because he is just a friend to me

Every time I see him I feel the pain again and again
I don't now how long in love I've been
I hate the way he only says "HEY!"
That is the whole conservation every day

Why should I love someone who doesn't love me back
But I love him so much I can't keep on track

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I know there are mistakes I'm not seeing, for some reason... but I wanna have it edited before I enter it in a couple contests... if anyone here is nice enough to look through and edit it fully and include it in their answer (or email it to mgranny1407@aol.com - my grandma's email) will get 10 points
Thanks in advance!!!
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Why Love~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Why should I love someone who doesn't love me back
But I love him so much I can't keep on track

Who can control their heart
Someone please teach me that great art

Why do I go throw this pain
It is making me go insane
I now he will never love me
Because he is just a friend to me

Every time I see him I feel the pain again and again
I don't now how long in love I've been
I hate the way he only says "HEY!"
That is the whole conservation every day

Why should I love someone who doesn't love me back
But I love him so much I can't keep on track

To what degree do you want it edited? Here I wrote it over with spelling corrected:

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Why Love~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Why should I love someone who doesn't love me back
But I love him so much I can't keep on track

Who can control their heart
Someone please teach me that great art

Why do I go through this pain
It is making me go insane
I know he will never love me
Because he is just a friend to me

Every time I see him I feel the pain again and again
I don't know how long in love I've been
I hate the way he only says "HEY!"
That is the whole conversation every day

Why should I love someone who doesn't love me back
But I love him so much I can't keep on track

And here I added some possible punctuation that you might want to consider:

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Why Love~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Why should I love someone who doesn't love me back?
But I love him so much; I can't keep on track

Who can control their heart?
Someone please teach me that great art.

Why do I go through this pain?
It is making me go insane.
I know he will never love me,
Because he is just a friend to me.

Every time I see him, I feel the pain again and again.
I don't know how long in love I've been.
I hate the way he only says "HEY!",
That is the whole conversation every day.

Why should I love someone who doesn't love me back?
But I love him so much; I can't keep on track.

Well, poetry is more a matter of art, of taste, than of science, so I'm not confident enough to go too far. However,
it should be, "Why do I go THROUGH this pain"
and "That is the whole CONVERSATION every day"

Also, know is spelled know, not "now"

"i KNOW he will never love me",
"that is the whole CONVERSATION of the day",
"why do i go THROUGH this pain",
and that's it, oh and i love that poem!!!

Why should i love him so much when he doesn't love me back?
But , I love him so much I can't keep on track.

Who can control his heart?
Someone please teach me that great art.

Why do I go through this pain?
It is making me insane-
I know he will never love me
For he is just a friend to me.

Every time I feel the pain again and again-
I don't know how long in love I've been.
I hate the way he only says "HEY!"
That is the whole conversation of the day.

Why should i love someone who doesn't love me back?
But , I love him so much I can't keep on track.

I will put the corrections in parenthesis next to where I believe it should be corrected...it may not be incorrect grammar, but it sure sounds better.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Why Love~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Why should I love someone who doesn't love me back
But I love him so much I can't(cannot) keep on track

Who can control their heart
(Will)Someone please teach me that great art(?)

Why do I go throw(through) this pain
It is making me go insane
I now(know) he will never love me
Because he (will always be) is just a friend(.) to me

Every time I see him I feel the pain again and again
I don't now(know) how long in love I've been
I hate the way he only says "HEY!"
That is the whole(only) conservation(conversation)(,) every day

Why should I love someone who doesn't love me back(?)
But I love him so much I can't(cannot) keep on track

(Okay, that was kind of confusing. I will put down the edited version, here):
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Why Love~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Why should I love someone who doesn't love me back?
But I love him so much, I cannot keep on track

Who can control their heart in a situation like this?
Will someone please teach me that great art, in that moment of bliss?

Why do I go through this pain
It is making me go insane
I know he will never love me
Because he will always be just a friend.

Every time I see him I feel the pain again and again
I don't know how long in love I've been
I hate the way he only says "Hey!"
That is the only conversation, every day

Why should I love someone who doesn't love me back?
But I love him so much, I cannot keep on track...

This is great keep up the good work! Just fix the words so they can rhyme i little bit better. otthe than that it good

It's a good poem but one of the huge detractors is that you have eleven (11) I's written in this poem. Since you said you were going to enter this into a contest I took the liberty of a quick re-write eliminating most of the "I's" which you may or may not like. I also corrected any spelling errors and added punctuation, and re-structured as well. Writing with "I's" is the way most of us start out writing and you need to concentrate on eliminating those in your future poems. You may not like it at first but it reads so much more trimlined and still holds to your theme and thought. I hope it helps.
It's really a good poem that only needed a little added work on it.

.........................Why Love.................................

Why do I love someone
Who doesn't love me back?
How can I love him so much
Knowing I can't keep on track.

Who can control their heart?
Someone please teach me
That
Great art.

Why go through this pain,
That is making me go insane.
Knowing he will never love me;
When he's only being friendly.

Seeing him only
Brings me pain;
Don't know how long
I've been loving him, and
Hating the way "Hey!" is our
Only conversation every day.

So why do I love someone
Who doesn't love me back?
I simply keep on loving him;
Just not able to stay on track.

I didn't know if you wanted to edit just the spelling and grammar or if you wanted the whole thing edited, so I did it both ways! The first is yours with a couple spelling errors fixed; the second is a partial rewrite. That one took me a while, so even if you don't like it, please tell me what you thought :D

-Dan

Why should I love someone who doesn't love me back
But I love him so much I can't keep on track

Who can control their heart
Someone please teach me that great art

Why do I go through this pain
It is making me go insane
I know he will never love me
Because he is just a friend to me

Every time I see him I feel the pain again and again
I don't now how long in love I've been
I hate the way he only says "HEY!"
That is the whole conservation every day

Why should I love someone who doesn't love me back
But I love him so much I can't keep on track

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~...

Should I love someone who can't love me back?
I love him so much that I can't keep on track

I'm losing control of my incomplete heart
Someone has to help me! I'm falling apart

I don't know why I go through all this pain
As day after day I become more insane
My mind tries to say that he can't love me
But at the same time my heart disagrees

So now when I see him I feel pain again
I don't now how long in love I have been
I can't stand the way that he only says "HEY!"
That is the whole conservation every day

Should I love someone who can't love me back?
I love him so much that I can't keep on track