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Question:Corporal Punishment

"Dare I eat a peach?" he asked
When I was a teen I laughed, a snort of scorn.
Now I'm seven three score, I'm not laughing any more.
Instead of throbbing loins, I have hopes of passing gas.
No more the ice cream sundae, no more the pizza feast
I don't even think that one day I'll do the two-backed beast.
My stomach rumbles, grumbles
My bones and muscles ache.
My hair falls out, a molar crumbles
How much more can I take?

Yet in my youth were other pains
"Am I good enough?" "Will she be mine?"
I like myself now, I'm havin' a real good time.
Life has been a hill of losses, but a mountain has been gained.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Corporal Punishment

"Dare I eat a peach?" he asked
When I was a teen I laughed, a snort of scorn.
Now I'm seven three score, I'm not laughing any more.
Instead of throbbing loins, I have hopes of passing gas.
No more the ice cream sundae, no more the pizza feast
I don't even think that one day I'll do the two-backed beast.
My stomach rumbles, grumbles
My bones and muscles ache.
My hair falls out, a molar crumbles
How much more can I take?

Yet in my youth were other pains
"Am I good enough?" "Will she be mine?"
I like myself now, I'm havin' a real good time.
Life has been a hill of losses, but a mountain has been gained.

Very much a "look at the bright side" poem for me, which is refreshing and something I definitely needed today. The optimism in the ending line is absolutely staggering and it threw me a good one across the room, and I promptly banged my head on the credenza, and suddenly forgot all of my troubles. Happy aging!

*tilts head to one side and looks confused* what'cha doing? LOL....Thats not a question! XD LOL HAHAHAHAHA ok

I'M FINE.What is the question?

Damn! You should scratch that pen to paper a lot more often if this is what comes out of it. It's great, it's descriptive and experientially accurate I'm afraid. :O))))) Love the point you are making about the difference in the pain experience between youth and the aging.

i got so board i stopped reading sorry :(

And folks wonder why I decided to scoot over to http://neopoet.com.

I've a couple suggestions to make.

In using the "score" system of rendering age, it is preferable to put out the higher number first. Think "four score and 7 years ago."

Also, I'd consider breaking it out into more lines. as an example:

"Dare I eat a peach?" he asked
When I was a teen I laughed,
A snort of scorn.
Now I'm three score and seven,
I'm not laughing any more.

But even though you have a score on me, I've reached the age where I can appreciate the betrayal of youth. Just when I've got the knowledge and resources to put it all to good use, it flees like a roach from the light.

Function is, as function was, as function wants to be.
Keep on writing, do, my friend...
Please bless us with your poetry!

Fire and water. Youth and age. Good and bad in all our life's phases. We must live in our time, whether we're young or old or in-between. I always love your answers, please write more poems.