Docile love? critique my poem please...?

Question:my heart is beating harder than the waves crashing into the shore tonight
there is a light
inside of you that shines so bright
don’t leave stay here
how can I make this crystal clear?
you need not fear
for everything in this life is made to be eventual
the sun must go down and give way to the moon, even the wrath of the heavens are appeasable
the shadow of in twilight keeps a promise made in vain
although it can from the heart it was spoken in dejection and in pain
with the world so tied up in its helpless games
burning bright are all these flames
so brilliant and wonderful are the displays
yet ultimately they will all fade away
I’m looking for a steady light
a shining star in my life
don’t need it to burn to bright
for I need it to last
until my revelations come to pass
see this secret promise that was made
cools my soul like a willow and its shade
yet I know that it's wrong so I must let go
but I don’t have anything to show
for the trials and tribulations that I have overcome
the truth can be bitter sweet depending on where it's coming from
so I need somebody to help me along the way
to encourage me when I falter and refuse to pray
my passions are not quite docile
so I need a love whose temperament is mild
to quench the thirst I have for compassion
who wont go about it in an ordinary fashion
for I need love that is different from the rest
a relationship that can be put to the test
but until then I must continue to wait
for what may become of my fate

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: my heart is beating harder than the waves crashing into the shore tonight
there is a light
inside of you that shines so bright
don’t leave stay here
how can I make this crystal clear?
you need not fear
for everything in this life is made to be eventual
the sun must go down and give way to the moon, even the wrath of the heavens are appeasable
the shadow of in twilight keeps a promise made in vain
although it can from the heart it was spoken in dejection and in pain
with the world so tied up in its helpless games
burning bright are all these flames
so brilliant and wonderful are the displays
yet ultimately they will all fade away
I’m looking for a steady light
a shining star in my life
don’t need it to burn to bright
for I need it to last
until my revelations come to pass
see this secret promise that was made
cools my soul like a willow and its shade
yet I know that it's wrong so I must let go
but I don’t have anything to show
for the trials and tribulations that I have overcome
the truth can be bitter sweet depending on where it's coming from
so I need somebody to help me along the way
to encourage me when I falter and refuse to pray
my passions are not quite docile
so I need a love whose temperament is mild
to quench the thirst I have for compassion
who wont go about it in an ordinary fashion
for I need love that is different from the rest
a relationship that can be put to the test
but until then I must continue to wait
for what may become of my fate

It was a good poem. About a third of the way through, the rhyming pattern changed, which kinda threw me off a little bit.
Also in that first third, I actually had to think after every line to try to see how it fit in with the ones around it. For me, it didn't really have a good flow to it then, which kinda made it forgettable.
But after that, I could tell exactly what you were trying to say and where you were going without having to think too hard about it. All in all, great job. I could really feel it about the last third of the poem. Good job.

Sweet,You Awsome

very good. the sensor language was appealing and it caught my attention , good use of rhythmic consonant sounds and words, keep doing what you do

There are some very good parts, however it seems like you're struggling to make it rhyme. You have a lot of flowery language too, which can be a good thing, unless you don't have a particularly strong subject... yours is kind of cliche. I think you could write excellent poetry--just keep on going and you'll find it.