Whatchu think bout my poetry? read plz?

Question:how can one day bring so much pain in my life
in 24 hours the years of pain you had replays in my head
thinking bout all the days we shared, wish i could go back in time and relive all the things we did
it hurt me so much to watch you suffer i would do anything to have back my beautiful mother
i would give my own life just to know that you'd be aight
they all thought that you would get caught up in the streets of l.a
but u conquered it mommy - you had goals you wanted to achieve
you wanted to make a betta life for me not going through the same hard times you delt wit
but this is the worst for me i lost you to some disease
it wasnt your time to go.. no matter what they say it wasnt your time to go
now im sitting here wondering why they had to take you from me but i got hopes. .i got hopes and dreams hoping they'll be as good as the things you've achieved.
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April 3 1960 - May 11 2006

and i know my poetry dont really rhyme and thats cuz i dont really like makin em ryhme. .enjoy!

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: how can one day bring so much pain in my life
in 24 hours the years of pain you had replays in my head
thinking bout all the days we shared, wish i could go back in time and relive all the things we did
it hurt me so much to watch you suffer i would do anything to have back my beautiful mother
i would give my own life just to know that you'd be aight
they all thought that you would get caught up in the streets of l.a
but u conquered it mommy - you had goals you wanted to achieve
you wanted to make a betta life for me not going through the same hard times you delt wit
but this is the worst for me i lost you to some disease
it wasnt your time to go.. no matter what they say it wasnt your time to go
now im sitting here wondering why they had to take you from me but i got hopes. .i got hopes and dreams hoping they'll be as good as the things you've achieved.
8 minutes ago - 3 days left to answer.
Additional Details
5 minutes ago

April 3 1960 - May 11 2006

and i know my poetry dont really rhyme and thats cuz i dont really like makin em ryhme. .enjoy!

thats hot girl u an amazing writer ur mama would be proud

it's stream of conciousness...a diary entry turned "free style"

you sound young...if you really want to be a poet, catch up on some of the classics

I really thought that it was a beautiful poem. Poems don't have to rhyme to be considered a poem...Not all poems rhyme and in fact, some of the best poems I have read did not rhyme.